english_learn
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Dear teacher,
Please read my writing below and kindly tell me what is my writing level such intermediate, upper intermediate, advanced etc. and what areas that I need to focus in order to improve my English to upper advanced level / highest level? Appreciate your 360 view feedback on my writing for my improvement
Organisations do not need to have human resources team to manage their equipment and only one human resource is sufficient to monitor them.
However, when companies keep on replacing human resources with technology, the society could face severe drawbacks. When unemployment is rate gone up, there will be poverty in the society and competition for jobs will increase. In order to win the competition and meet employer’s expectation job seekers will be forced to gain highest possible skills which could cost lots of money. People who cannot afford to pay for gaining skills will be stuck with unemployment. As a result, people will not have the capacity to full fill their needs which could impact country’s economy.
Therefore, organisations should not only focus on their business benefits when automating the business process but also think about society future. The Government should come up with a law to enforce business to maintain a reasonable balance between technology equipment and human resources.
Please read my writing below and kindly tell me what is my writing level such intermediate, upper intermediate, advanced etc. and what areas that I need to focus in order to improve my English to upper advanced level / highest level? Appreciate your 360 view feedback on my writing for my improvement
Organisations do not need to have human resources team to manage their equipment and only one human resource is sufficient to monitor them.
However, when companies keep on replacing human resources with technology, the society could face severe drawbacks. When unemployment is rate gone up, there will be poverty in the society and competition for jobs will increase. In order to win the competition and meet employer’s expectation job seekers will be forced to gain highest possible skills which could cost lots of money. People who cannot afford to pay for gaining skills will be stuck with unemployment. As a result, people will not have the capacity to full fill their needs which could impact country’s economy.
Therefore, organisations should not only focus on their business benefits when automating the business process but also think about society future. The Government should come up with a law to enforce business to maintain a reasonable balance between technology equipment and human resources.