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    Please help me to correct my sentences

    Dear teachers,
    I feel my sentences are not correct but I don't know how to revise it. Please help me. Thanks in advance.

    "In secondary school, my science teachers taught me a lot of nature laws of which I later found an interesting common point. Everything tends to achieve the lowest energy state. Water will move from higher ground to lower one while air move from higher pressure to lower pressure. Every chemical particle tends to combine with others to achieve the lower chemical energy states. I felt excited to find the explanations for this coincidence. “Shouldn’t be the higher the better?”- I wondered. Much to my surprise, I got the answer from a wise martial art master."

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    Tran.
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    Re: Please help me to correct my sentences

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    I think my sentences are not correct, but I don't know how to revise them.

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    Re: Please help me to correct my sentences

    "In secondary school, my science teachers taught me a lot of nature about the laws of nature, of which I later found an interesting common point. Everything tends to achieve the lowest energy state. Water will move from a higher ground level to lower one level while air moves from an area of higher pressure to lower pressure. Every chemical particle tends to combine with others to achieve the lower lowest chemical energy states. I felt excited to find the explanations for this coincidence. “Shouldn’t be the higher the state be better?”- I wondered. Much to my surprise, I got the answer from a wise martial art master."

    My understanding of the physics and chemistry principle is that things tend to attain a state of equilibrium given that the surrounding conditions such as the pressure, volume and temperature are constant.
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    martial arts

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    Re: Please help me to correct my sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post

    My understanding of the physics and chemistry principle is that things tend to attain a state of equilibrium given that the surrounding conditions such as the pressure, volume and temperature are constant.
    Thanks Tedmc for your corrections.
    You are right that things tend to attain a state of equilibrium which would be lowest energy state. My question is why it is so. Why do things tend to attain of equilibrium? Why don't they just stay at where they are? I try to explain it in the next paragraph which I'm still writing half way. Then, I try to extend this law to our daily life both spiritually, mentally and physically.

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    Things that are not in a state of equilibrium are in an unstable condition and is not sustainable. There is the natural tendency to readjust and move to a stable state.
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    Two things.

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    our daily lives

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    an unstable condition that is not sustainable

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