Correct my passage Please (Memory)

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EMHM

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I have written this passage just for practice. Please check it for me.

"I still remember names of my class mates in the primary school, but the names of my 12[SUP]th[/SUP] grade mates are not clear in my mind. I wonder why is that? If the storing of thoughts is in sequence, the first In, the first to forget.
I watched many videos about the memory mechanism of storing and retaining the names, faces, smell and even the taste of food. Every time I watch such video, I try to understand it carefully, but still I need more information in this regard.
What type of memory that can keep all that much of information for that long of time with that degree of accuracy?!"
 

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I still remember the names of my classmates [STRIKE]in the[/STRIKE] from primary school, but the names of my [STRIKE]12[SUP]th[/SUP] grade[/STRIKE] classmates from grade 12 are not clear in my mind. I wonder why [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] that is. If [STRIKE]the storing of thoughts is in[/STRIKE] memory stores information sequentially, [STRIKE]ce,[/STRIKE] the first in should be the first to forget.
I've watched many videos about the memory's mechanism of storing and retaining [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] names, faces, smells and even the tastes of various foods. Every time I watch such videos, I take great interest in them, [STRIKE]try to understand it carefully,[/STRIKE] but still I need more information in this regard.
[STRIKE]What type of[/STRIKE] I find it truly fascinating that our memory [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] can keep [STRIKE]all[/STRIKE] that much [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] information for [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] such a long [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] time with [STRIKE]that[/STRIKE] an incredible degree of accuracy!
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Perhaps:

The first in should be the first out

Or:

The first in should be the one I am most likely to forget.

(Emotional content has something to do with memory storage.)
 
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