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    #1

    Peter walked on the beach

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    Peter walked on the beach and when he reached the road, he stopped and shook the sand out of his shoes.

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    Re: Peter walked on the beach

    It would be better as two sentences.
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    #3

    Re: Peter walked on the beach

    I am wondering if my sentence would be better if I put a comma after "beach."

    Peter walked on the beach, and when he reached the road, he stopped and shook the sand out of his shoes.

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    #4

    Re: Peter walked on the beach

    The sentence contains two distinct ideas. I'd split it into two.
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    #5

    Re: Peter walked on the beach

    How about: Peter walked on the beach and reached the road. He stopped to shake the sand off his shoes.
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    #6

    Re: Peter walked on the beach

    I think this expresses the narrative better: Peter walked on the beach. When he reached the road, he stopped to shake the sand off his shoes.
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