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    Post Please contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Hi,

    This is the sentence I am querying - "Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter."

    What would be the correct way to make this crystal clear if a father is writing it line so that misunderstanding should not be created or is this sentence is more understandable?.

    I am open to suggestions for how to write in a proper and crystal clear manner.

    Thanks in advance.
    Last edited by WingSaber; 08-Aug-2016 at 10:18. Reason: Enlarged font to make post readable

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Quote Originally Posted by WingSaber View Post
    Hi,

    This is the line sentence I am querying - "Please kindly contact me only if you are a parent of your daughter."

    What would be the correct way to write make this crystal clearly clear when if a father is writing it this line so that misunderstanding should not be created or is this sentence is more than enough to understandable? itself.

    I am open for to suggestions for how to write it in a proper & and crystal clearly clear manner.

    Thanks in advance.
    Welcome to the forum.

    1. Use either "Please" or "Kindly" but not both. If you use both, one is redundant because in this context they mean the same thing.
    2. Who is writing the sentence?
    3. Who are they writing to?

    Note my corrections above. "Crystal clear" is the adjective you're looking for. We don't use "crystal clearly" and if we did, it would an adverb.

    I have changed your thread title so that it is relevant to this thread. Titles should include some or all of the words you are querying.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Would the parents please contact me about your daughter?
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    Would the parents please contact me about your daughter?
    That only works if everyone knows the identity of the daughter in question.

    I am looking for the parents of Abigail Jones. Please don't contact me unless you are one of her parents.

    (I'm not sure why anyone but Abigail's parents would contact the speaker after sentence 1, but I suppose it's now crystal clear.)
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Question Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Welcome to the forum.

    1. Use either "Please" or "Kindly" but not both. If you use both, one is redundant because in this context they mean the same thing.
    2. Who is writing the sentence?
    3. Who are they writing to?

    Note my corrections above. "Crystal clear" is the adjective you're looking for. We don't use "crystal clearly" and if we did, it would an adverb.

    I have changed your thread title so that it is relevant to this thread. Titles should include some or all of the words you are querying.
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    1. Thanks for correcting. I'll do that as you suggested.

    2. Father is writing the sentence

    3. He's addresses in matrimonial site to the parent of the daughter.

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    Red face Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Welcome to the forum.

    1. Use either "Please" or "Kindly" but not both. If you use both, one is redundant because in this context they mean the same thing.
    2. Who is writing the sentence?
    3. Who are they writing to?

    Note my corrections above. "Crystal clear" is the adjective you're looking for. We don't use "crystal clearly" and if we did, it would an adverb.

    I have changed your thread title so that it is relevant to this thread. Titles should include some or all of the words you are querying.
    1. Thanks for correcting me with my post & I have re-edited the post. I'm still learning & been out of touch from grammar section for a very long time. Although, English is my first language. I have always been confused between Please and Kindly so I used both in one. I'm clear with my confusion now.

    2. This sentence is written by Father' side writing for a son's profile in a matrimonial site.

    3. He's writing or addressing to parents of the daughter in the matrimonial site who visits his profile & therefore, they wish to contact him. I just wanted to write in a clear manner so it's easier to understand it's written by father (parent) & then wishes to contact him.

    Is this sentence correct & easier for them to understand - "Kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter."

    I don't know why I get the feeling that it can be misunderstood when written like this, What would be another way of writing it correctly. I'm still thinking about it to write another form.
    Last edited by WingSaber; 08-Aug-2016 at 13:17.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    "... the parent of a young lady who is happy/willing to take part in an arranged marriage".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    Agreed, I'm just so confused to how to write in proper manner to understand more effectively.

    I do agree it does sound strange, that is why I was puzzled about it. If you have more suggestions, Please do let me know.
    Last edited by WingSaber; 08-Aug-2016 at 12:56.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    As you suggested if I correctly understand , if written like this - "Kindly contact only if you are the parent of the maiden who is happy/willing to take part in an arranged marriage."

    It does have humble request which is necessary & not feeling accurate for some reason. Would young lady sound inappropriate for an age over 21+ since they are still young.
    I thought of adding word "Maiden" as the best appeal in this case. What do you think of this sentence?. If you have more suggestions, please do let me know.
    Last edited by WingSaber; 08-Aug-2016 at 13:26.

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    Re: Please kindly contact me only If you are a parent of your daughter

    No problem, I'm so stuck badly with this part that I do need to correct it but I feel like I ran out of conclusions. I just wanted to write in proper & humble manner towards their parents to avoid confusion. After all, it should be parent - parent. The point is that there are many profiles created by females without their parents consent & he doesn't want to be contacted by those profiles who created by themselves, siblings apart from parents itself since it's arranged marriage so parents play first role in communication to contact other end. He want to avoid those profile where siblings or profiles who create themselves & henceforth, give a warning before contacting his own son's profile, after all, he created a profile for his son and looking for a bride for his own son in matrimonial site.

    I really do appreciate your suggestion & Thanks again.

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