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    Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    "Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl's eyes. Mark runs away from the living. while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."

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    #2

    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Source and author?

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    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Dear Rover KE

    I am the author of the text. But I am aware that it have a lot of mistakes due that english is not my native language.

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    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    The Similar Threads below show that 'incandescent light' is best avoided.

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    #5

    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Mark runs away from the living, while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."
    "The living" means the living people (those not dead).
    Is that what you intend?

    Also, it's a bit unclear who you intend "he" to refer to.
    Finally, why are there quotes around "Athena?"

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    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Dear Rover KE

    I am the author of the text (no full stop here) but I am aware that it have has/contains a lot of mistakes due to the fact that English is not my native language.

    Thanks.
    Note my corrections above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl‘s eyes

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    "Kevin aims the incandescent light into Carl's eyes. Mark runs away from the living. while Kevin removes the photos of “Athena” from the shelf, and then he goes to the living."

    Thanks.
    I would just use "light" or "bright light". What do you mean by "Mark runs away from the living"? Remove the comma after the first "living". What do you mean by "he goes back to the living"?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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