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    The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the tasks

    Hello

    Could you check the following text?


    The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the tasks related to animal husbandry and proper use of current facilities and human resources to adjust marketing in the fields of feedstuffs and animal products as well as attaining the objectives set in the second economic, social and cultural development plan to improve governmental establishment structure and attracting private and cooperative sections.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    That sentence is far too long and rambling. It is almost impossible to work out what you are trying to say.

    Before we can attempt to disentangle it, what do you mean by 'maximising compliance and integrity'? Compliance with what?

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    I agree with Piscean. Try to break up that text into a few sentences.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    I agree with Piscean. Try to break up that text into a few sentences.
    The company started in 1987 aimed at increasing compliance and integrity with parallel companies in the tasks related to animal husbandry and proper use of current facilities and human resources.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    I still don't get it. Companies usually have to comply with statutory regulations rather than "parallel companies" (whatever that means). Also, what do you mean by "proper use of ... human resources?"

    I suggest you rephrase the whole thing in plain and simple language.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    "Parallel companies" presumably mean the other players or competitors in the same industry, in which case, "compliance and integrity" are not relevant.
    Do you mean "efficent/optimum use of facilities and human resources"? What do you mean by "to adjust marketing"?

    ..to improve governmental establishment structure and attracting private and cooperative sections - This sounds far too complicated.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    I don't get it either. Who starts a company with the main aim of complying with the appropriate regulations?

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    I have rephrased the first sentence of the above text as follows:

    The company started in 1987 aimed at improving efficiency of
    the tasks related to animal husbandry and proper use of current facilities and staff.
    Last edited by majid72; 30-Aug-2016 at 07:50.

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    It's still not quite clear to me. Can you please use a few sentences to explain (in simple language) what you mean?

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    Re: The company started in 1987 aimed at maximizing compliance and integrity in the t

    I note that the question has now been asked at another forum.

    https://www.englishforums.com/Englis...kkvdg/post.htm

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