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    Please check my grammar.....

    Dear All,


    I had resigned my job sunddenly without notice period 2 months back due to accident. I informed my boss about my accident also said that i wud like to resign my job. Boss accepted my resignation also cleared my due payment. We will have 2 shifts job like 1 week morning shift and 1 week afternoon shift. Now i hav recovered somehow, i would like to rejoin but i can do only fixed morning shift job becz wen we have afternoon shift, we have travel in the night....night i couldn't be able to travel as i hav met with accident during that time. Also i come from long distance in heavy traffic. If my boss accept my request i would like to rejoin only morning shift.....


    Friends i need a letter on this topic to my boss....
    Please help me...


    Respected sir,
    I am Xxx. Firstly i would like to say thanks as i received my july month salary. I am writing this letter to request you for my rejoining of the company. As you know that I have resigned from the company two months back due to leg injury in a road accident. I have being recovered now. I would like to rejoin if it is possible to arrange fixed morning shift for me.Because when i have afternoon shift, i have to travel in the night.Night i couldn't be able to travel as i have met with accident during that time, also i come from long distance in heavy traffic. If it is possible to arrange morning shift for me then i can rejoin.
    Hope you consider my request and do needful


    Thanks and Regards,


    Yours sincerely,
    xxxx


    Is this letter looking like formal letter....plz do if any changes
    Thanks In Advance !!

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    Re: Plzz check my grammer.....

    Quote Originally Posted by Maggi54 View Post
    Dear all, Unnecessarily formal. This is not a letter. Try "Hello everyone."

    I had resigned my job sunddenly suddenly, without giving the requisite notice period, 2 two months back due to an accident. I informed my boss about my accident. Also, I said that I wud would like to resign from my job. My boss accepted my resignation also and cleared my due payment paid me what I was owed. We will have 2 shifts I worked in a job like which entailed 1 one week of morning shifts and 1 one week of afternoon shifts. Now I have recovered somehow somewhat, I would like to rejoin go back to work but I can do only fixed morning shifts job becz because when we I have an afternoon shift, we I have to travel in the at night. ight I couldn't be able to don't want to travel at night as because I had met with my accident at night. during that time. Also, I come from a long distance in heavy traffic. If my boss accepts my request I would like to rejoin work only the morning shift.


    Friends I need to write a letter on this topic about this to my boss.
    Please help me.


    Respected Dear Sir, (using his name would be better)

    I am Xxx.

    First, I would like to say thanks as i received for my July month salary. I am writing this letter to request you for my to rejoining of the company. As you know, that I have resigned from the company two months back due to the leg injury I sustained in a road accident. I have being now recovered. now.

    I would like, if possible, to rejoin to come back to work if it is possible to arrange fixed but I would be able to work only the morning shift. for me. This is because when have to work the afternoon shift, I would have to travel in the at night. Night i couldn't be able to I don't want to travel at night as that is when I have met with had my accident. during that time, Also, I have to come from travel a long distance in heavy traffic.

    If it is possible to arrange only morning shifts for me then I can rejoin. would be able to return to work.

    Hope you Thank you for considering my request. and do needful

    Thanks and Regards,


    Yours sincerely, (That's right if you start with "Dear + boss's name". If you use "Dear Sir" at the start, use "Yours faithfully" at the end.)

    [Your name]


    Is this letter looking like formal? letter... plz Please do make if any necessary changes.
    Thanks in advance. !!
    Welcome to the forum.

    Please note my corrections to your post above, marked in red.

    Remember to follow these rules of written English at all times:

    - Start every sentence with a capital letter.
    - End every sentence with one, appropriate punctuation mark.
    - Always capitalise the word "I".
    - Do not put a space before a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.
    - Always put a space after a comma, full stop, question mark or exclamation mark.

    Don't use chatlish/textspeak on this forum. "Plz", "hav", "becz" are not words.

    I don't think you can tell your boss that you "can't" travel at night. It is understandable that you are nervous about travelling at night because of your accident but you are technically able to travel at any time. Bear in mind as well that if you resigned two months ago, your job might no longer be available. If your boss told you when you resigned that you were welcome to re-apply when you had recovered, then you might have a chance.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Plzz check my grammer.....

    Hello sir,
    Thanks a lot for your advice. It will be very helpful for me.

    I would like to ask you a doubt.


    Don't know my boss will accept my request.
    Is this wrong, If i say like this "Hope you consider my request"

    Thanks
    Last edited by Rover_KE; 22-Sep-2016 at 23:09. Reason: Deleting quote.

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    Re: Plzz check my grammer.....

    Quote Originally Posted by Maggi54 View Post
    Hello. sir, Please don't refer to users here as "Sir". Not only is it too formal but it also excludes all our female members.

    Thanks a lot for your advice. It will be very helpful for me.

    I would like to ask you about a doubt I have. I don't know if my boss will accept my request.
    Is this it wrong (no comma here) if I say like this "I hope you will consider my request."

    Thanks.
    See above for my corrections and the correct version of your suggested sentence.

    Please read that list of rules of written English again. If necessary, print it out and keep it next to your computer. In this post, you failed to capitalise "I" again and you omitted to use a punctuation mark at the end of two sentences.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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