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    The electricity keeps coming and going.

    (Tom to his group of friends over skype)"Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer. The electricity keeps coming and going. The electricity comes and goes within the gap of five minutes so I don't know for how long will I be able to stay with you or continue with you guys. If the electricity goes off again, my connection will get disconnected."

    Please check.

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    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    Quote Originally Posted by tufguy View Post
    (Tom to his group of friends over Skype.)

    "Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer. The electricity keeps coming and going. The electricity comes and goes within the gap of five minutes so I don't know for how long will I be able to stay with you or continue with you guys. If the electricity goes off again, my connection will get disconnected."

    Please check.
    It's very long-winded.

    "There's a problem with the electricity [supply] today. It's going on and off every five minutes so I'm sorry if we suddenly get cut off."
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #3

    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    It's very long-winded.

    "There's a problem with the electricity [supply] today. It's going on and off every five minutes so I'm sorry if we suddenly get cut off."
    Could you please check my sentences as well, whether they are grammatical or not? Especially I would like to know about "connection will get disconnected and how long will I be able to stay with you."
    Last edited by tufguy; 23-Sep-2016 at 07:02.

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    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    "Connection will get disconnected" is not very natural even though it's grammatically correct. It's the repetition of "connection" that makes it clunky. Maybe "I don't know how long I'll be able to stay online [talking to you] before I get disconnected".
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    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    Or simplify it to read: The power supply is intermittent. I'm sorry if we suddenly get cut off.

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    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Today we are facing power cuts. I think there is something wrong with one of the electricity poles or transformer.
    Is it correct to use "electricity poles"?

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    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    As long as these are what you're talking about, yes.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #8

    Re: The electricity keeps coming and going.

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    It's very long-winded.
    Generally, we try to say things succinctly- long-winded explanations that include unnecessary information rarely help. Your version does the same job in one line.

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