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    Need help with essay

    Hello!

    I would like to ask for your help with an essay I've written. The exercise is the following:

    Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting theri time which could be better used doing other more useful activities.


    To what extent do you agree?

    My answer is below.



    Essay: Reading at early age


    Some people believe reading is a waste of time and children should do more useful activities instead. I completely disagree with this notion. I think the love for books and reading is one of the most important interest any parent could pass onto their child.


    First of all, let me clarify my standpoint, I don't think all reading is equal and devouring books without selection is a positive attitude. I also don't think that only reading should be encouraged at young age, of course, there are a lot of other interest and hobbies a child can chase and benefit from it later on, for example, regular exercise.


    With that said I do think that reading is important, in order to be successful in life we have to read and understand a large array of texts both through school and work and generally in life. Those who read a lot tend to also read faster, understand the meaning of texts better and be able to draw conclusions quickly. This skill gives them a competitive edge in all aspects of life. Furthermore, despite the wide range of tools available to us, highly successful people still, both recommend reading and read themselves. From Warren Buffet through Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg to Elon Musk, all known to read an enormous amount of books through the year. Meaning, even though they have a very busy schedule, they still find the time to read. It is for a good reason too, reading about topics like politics, economy, IT trends or anything related to their profession, makes them knowledgeable, thus allowing them to recognise patterns, find talent and be creative like no-one else.


    All in all, I think the above proves that reading is an extremely outstanding activity, therefore, it should be started as a child to enjoy the long-term benefits it has on one's life.

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    Re: Need help with essay

    When are you going to submit your essay to your teacher/tutor for marking/grading?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Need help with essay

    Quote Originally Posted by reifm View Post
    I completely disagree with this notion.
    (This sentence is too short for an essay. It is good to write a combination of simple and complex sentence in an essay, but a simple sentence should not be too short.)

    I also don't think that only reading should be encouraged at young age, of course, there are a lot of other interest and hobbies a child can chase and benefit from it later on, for example, regular exercise. ( It is too long sentence. Keep one argument in a sentence. In your sentence, you have brought two arguments: reading should be encouraged, child can chase other interests)
    Also, you have repeated the same phrase 'I think' again and again ; you should avoid such repetition in an essay.

    Just follow the structure below for the conclusion paragraph.

    - First sentence: This restates your position, and typically starts with "In conclusion,"
    - One or two sentences summarizing the findings from your body paragraphs.


    I am not an expert nor a native speaker.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 04-Oct-2016 at 20:44. Reason: Removed extraneous line breaks

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    Re: Need help with essay

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    When are you going to submit your essay to your teacher/tutor for marking/grading?
    Hi emsr2d2,

    Sorry for the late answer, I just started a new job and I had a lot on my plate the last couple of weeks. I don't exactly understand what you mean, I don't have a tutor right now, I try to study on my own for the time being.

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    Re: Need help with essay

    OK, that's fine. We always check that users' posts are not homework or an assignment.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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