smar
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Hello, please tell me if this extremely short story is correct gramatically, thank you very much. And if not, what can I correct, thank you so much.
Story:
-The man was strong and noble, from time to time the devil lurked from the dark and he slipped these vile thoughts into the man's head, but the man was so strong and he never fell for his tricks. Each and every day the man was always able to send the devil back home empty handed, with his tricks and depraved thoughts, these sick ideas. The man never fell for it and eventually the devil stopped trying and coming, he disappeared forever. Days passed by quickly and the man waited carefully for the devil as he thought this is another one of his tricks, but the devil never came back. It was on the sunniest and brightest of days that these depraved thoughts came back, the man shook in horror, he was confused, how could it be, the devil is not coming anymore, he is long gone. And at that moment the man knew, there was never any devil at all, he never existed, all along it was the man. And so it was.
Story:
-The man was strong and noble, from time to time the devil lurked from the dark and he slipped these vile thoughts into the man's head, but the man was so strong and he never fell for his tricks. Each and every day the man was always able to send the devil back home empty handed, with his tricks and depraved thoughts, these sick ideas. The man never fell for it and eventually the devil stopped trying and coming, he disappeared forever. Days passed by quickly and the man waited carefully for the devil as he thought this is another one of his tricks, but the devil never came back. It was on the sunniest and brightest of days that these depraved thoughts came back, the man shook in horror, he was confused, how could it be, the devil is not coming anymore, he is long gone. And at that moment the man knew, there was never any devil at all, he never existed, all along it was the man. And so it was.