[Essay] Help me to correct my Statement of purpose

[Pancho123]

« Persistence in scientific research leads to what i call instinct for truth » Louis Pasteur .The persistence and relentless are the key for the life of a scientist due to the fact that to study the molecular mechanisms of disease like cancer ,HIV etc needs remarkable commitment and focus .And the instinct for truth(new discovery) is always the reward for the human kind and the world as a whole .I relentlessly dedicated my life for the new discovery in the field of biomedical sciences especially Cancer Biology and Biotechnology

 

[teechar]

It's too long. Do you think you can make it shorter? I would suggest an upper limit of 500-600 words.

 

[emsr2d2]

When you rewrite it, remember to put an extra line space between each paragraph. That will make it much easier to read.