1. ## Hello, please check my writing task 1 for ielts, espaccially grammar

The line graph demonstrate teenagers who keep a vegetarian diet from 1960 till 2000.
Since 1960 adolesents actively started adhere a vegetarian diet. As showed on the graph from 1960 till 1980 there was a gradually rise at 16 per sent. Following by a moderate fall until 1990. since then, there was observed a fluctuation until 2000. After fluctuation it raising slightly and then it levelled off.
Overall, the graph shows that a vegeterian diet was popular from 1960 since 1980, but then is losed value and dipped, however it starts to rise in 2010 and remains the same.

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2. ## Re: Hello, please check my writing task 1 for ielts, espaccially grammar

Originally Posted by Rina2704
The line graph demonstrate the number/percentage of teenagers who keep followed a vegetarian diet from 1960 till 2000.

Since In 1960, adolescents they actively started to adhere to a vegetarian diet. As showed shown on the graph, from 1960 till 1980, there was a gradually gradual rise at of 16 per cent, followeding by a moderate fall until 1990. Since then, there was observed a the percentage fluctuatedion until 2000. After the fluctuation, it raising rose slightly and then it levelled off.

Overall, the graph shows that a vegetarian diet was popular from 1960 since until 1980, but then is it losed lost value and dipped. However, it started to rise in 2010 and remains the same. (That doesn't make sense. It can't start to rise and remain the same.)
See my corrections above. Some of it isn't logical but without seeing the graph, I can't work out what it should say.

You said that the graph only covers the years 1960 to 2000 but in your piece you talk about what happened after 2000, particularly what happened in 2010. If the piece is based on the graph, you can only talk about the years from 1960 to 2000.

3. ## Re: Hello, please check my writing task 1 for ielts, espaccially grammar

I am sorry, this is the picture of task and thank you so much for correcting wy work. I will be work better

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