s4196
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Hello. I am preparing for a writing exam, so I started to write some random essays to improve my writing.
Below is the one of my essays. I would love to know if there are any grammar mistakes.
I felt depressed, but it was not the result of my sentimentality. Actually, it was one kind of psychological disorder. When feeling distress, most people can deal with it in an appropriate way. However, people who suffer from depression can't. Patients with minor symptoms may be willing to talk to others, but those who have serious depression symptoms would rather leave their heart polluted than seek an approach to tackle it. Overwhelmed by frustration, they would love to hurt their bodies and try to commit suicide to rest in peach for good. I am glad that I had gone through the whole process and survived it.
At the tender age of twelve, my parents got divorced. Divorced per-se was just the last straw, their long-term argument was the major factor that contributed to my depression. Initially, I only realized I had been prone to feel exhausted with no reason, but before long I came to wonder why my tears would well spontaneously. I tell myself it didn't work, so I went to see a shrink. I didn't think he would take me seriously in the first place. To my surprise, he listened to each of my words with concentration. I was diagnosed as minor depression and took a pack of medicine. The medicine worked wonders. I regained my sensible mind within a period of treatments. Now I have recovered, but many of my fellows haven't. They haven't been treated well and in the end have drowned in their agonies.
(Thanks to spelling check, I didn't know how poor my spelling is until now.)
Edit:By the way, can I continue posting other articles in this thread or should I post in a new thread? Is there a quota?
Below is the one of my essays. I would love to know if there are any grammar mistakes.
I felt depressed, but it was not the result of my sentimentality. Actually, it was one kind of psychological disorder. When feeling distress, most people can deal with it in an appropriate way. However, people who suffer from depression can't. Patients with minor symptoms may be willing to talk to others, but those who have serious depression symptoms would rather leave their heart polluted than seek an approach to tackle it. Overwhelmed by frustration, they would love to hurt their bodies and try to commit suicide to rest in peach for good. I am glad that I had gone through the whole process and survived it.
At the tender age of twelve, my parents got divorced. Divorced per-se was just the last straw, their long-term argument was the major factor that contributed to my depression. Initially, I only realized I had been prone to feel exhausted with no reason, but before long I came to wonder why my tears would well spontaneously. I tell myself it didn't work, so I went to see a shrink. I didn't think he would take me seriously in the first place. To my surprise, he listened to each of my words with concentration. I was diagnosed as minor depression and took a pack of medicine. The medicine worked wonders. I regained my sensible mind within a period of treatments. Now I have recovered, but many of my fellows haven't. They haven't been treated well and in the end have drowned in their agonies.
(Thanks to spelling check, I didn't know how poor my spelling is until now.)
Edit:By the way, can I continue posting other articles in this thread or should I post in a new thread? Is there a quota?
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