Results 1 to 5 of 5
  1. Newbie
    Interested in Language
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Hindi
      • Home Country:
      • India
      • Current Location:
      • India

    • Join Date: Nov 2016
    • Posts: 2
    #1

    Analyze / improve / rephrase sentence to improve for resume

    Hi,

    I would like to add the following sentences on my resume for interviewer to really get my resume noticed (I feel so), but I am not happy with its overall formation and structure.

    Can you guys help restructure the following sentence(s) while preserving the meaning so it gives a better impression ??

    WORK PHILOSOPHY: I strive to manifest company's values, branding style, product & services, into company’s website, that aims to create the impression that client's wants in their visitors mind.

    As a result of efforts, clients saw their tremendous business and income boost, giving them many fold ROI and transformed them into brands in their resp.


    Guys, any help is appreciated.

    thanks
    dk
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 07-Nov-2016 at 19:47. Reason: Removed quote box so it's easier for responders to quote

  2. teechar's Avatar
    Moderator
    English Teacher
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 7,310
    #2

    Re: Analyze / improve / rephrase sentence to improve for resume

    Quote Originally Posted by dkja View Post
    that aims to create the impression that client's wants in their visitors mind.
    Quote Originally Posted by dkja View Post
    transformed them into brands in their resp.
    I don't understand the above.

  3. Newbie
    Interested in Language
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • Hindi
      • Home Country:
      • India
      • Current Location:
      • India

    • Join Date: Nov 2016
    • Posts: 2
    #3

    Re: Analyze / improve / rephrase sentence to improve for resume

    that aims to create the impression that client's wants in their visitors mind.
    Every company have a certain way of doing business manufacturing products or providing services which they pride in and so they cater to customer in their own unique way. through my website design, I try to present that unique style be it in terms of branding (logo, color). What I meant by above is that I try to design websites as clients would want to present their company's images / product services in front of prospective customer / website visitors.

    transformed them into brands in their resp.
    Their websites have been so successful that it has transformed their small business (almost unknown) to a established one and also created a sort of a known name (their websites comes up on top of search results page for popular keywords) in their own field. For e.g a dermatologist providing hair transplant services have benefited from their hair transplant websites so much so that they are now the one of the most popular surgeon if someone wants an hair transplant surgery done.

    As I am not very good in English grammar, I hope you get what I mean by above explanations.

  4. emsr2d2's Avatar
    Moderator
    English Teacher
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • British English
      • Home Country:
      • UK
      • Current Location:
      • UK

    • Join Date: Jul 2009
    • Posts: 44,800
    #4

    Re: Analyze / improve / rephrase sentence to improve for resume

    Quote Originally Posted by dkja View Post
    Hi,

    I would like to add the following sentences on to my rsum for interviewer to really get my resume it noticed (I feel so think that will work), but I am not happy with its overall formation and structure.

    Can you guys help restructure the following sentence(s) while preserving the meaning so it gives a better impression? ??



    Guys, Any help is appreciated.

    Thanks.
    dk
    See my corrections to the rest of your post above.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

  5. teechar's Avatar
    Moderator
    English Teacher
    • Member Info
      • Native Language:
      • English
      • Home Country:
      • Iraq
      • Current Location:
      • Iraq

    • Join Date: Feb 2015
    • Posts: 7,310
    #5

    Re: Analyze / improve / rephrase sentence to improve for resume

    I endeavour to ensure that a company's website successfully projects the company's values, branding style, and range of products & services to its audience base.

    Thanks to my efforts, my clients' websites have seen tremendous growth in terms of visitors and substantial increase in revenue.

Similar Threads

  1. [Resume] Please help me to improve my Resume
    By Tran Thai Hung in forum CVs, Resumes and Applications
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 10-Aug-2016, 12:03
  2. Replies: 4
    Last Post: 30-Oct-2012, 07:21
  3. improve my sentence please
    By hanky in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: 03-Nov-2008, 09:17
  4. Please improve the sentence
    By NewHope in forum Ask a Teacher
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: 03-Sep-2004, 18:09

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •