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    #1

    opinion on these sentences

    Hi.
    I'd like to get your opinion on these sentences.
    1. "Among the sexually active group, only 41% had used a condom and 66.7% had encountered multiple sexual partners"
    Can I rephrase it like: "Among the sexually active group, only 41% and 66.7% of them had used a condom and encountered multiple sexual partners, respectively"

    2. "It is quite astonishing to find that sexually active students had injected drugs (5.8%), taken drugs (9.4%) and consumed alcohol (17.4%) during their sexual intercourse"
    Can I rephrase it: It is quite astonishing to find out that sexually active students had injected drugs (5.8%), and consumed drugs (9.4%) and alcohol (17.4%), respectively, during their sexual intercourse"

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    Mektok
    Last edited by mektok; 24-Nov-2016 at 01:04.

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    #2

    Re: opinion on these sentences

    They had sex with them. They didn't encounter them.

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    #3

    Re: opinion on these sentences

    The original sentence #1 is clearer than your revised version.

    The word 'respectively' is completely unnecessary in your version of #2, and the addition of 'out' is not an improvement.

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    #4

    Re: opinion on these sentences

    Perhaps:

    Among the sexually active group, only 41% had used a condom, and 67% had sexual relations with multiple partners.

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    #5

    Re: opinion on these sentences

    Space between paragraphs, please!

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    #6

    Re: opinion on these sentences

    I don't know who you are quoting, but they seem to think that alcohol is not a drug. They are wrong. It is a drug. Also, it should not be surprising that people would drink beer or smoke dope prior to having sex.

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    #7

    Sex survey

    This is my title for this thread:

    Sex survey

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