hai_lua_t2
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Hello All,
I am trying to practice improve writing skills by myself. The below is my essay, please give your opinion. Any idea, correction for vocabulary, grammar, structure is really appreciated. I think I still repeat the word quite much and the words are not really academic.
Thank you!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to give my opinion about the evening programs. Honestly, I have a feeling that these programs are not really interesting. Why I say this, because they are giving the less useful information for people who are being in school as me even though it is boring in some cases. I hardly find the new knowledge or advice so far. Instead of broadcasting them, I think it is better if we are able to replace by the new programs which are focus on education or sport. The viewers may be interested in in your channel, they can find a lot more good information. It is a wonderful channel if people can discover new things on the show every evening. These such programs are also attractive the parents who think their children will get many lessons or experiences base on the educational contents. Along with education we can create channels for those who love sport. If you allow live games such as football or baseball, etc. Customers are willing to pay money to subscribe for your channels. It help your station become more well-known and powerful, the business has an opportunity to develop.
That is all about my point of view. I hope I can get your feedback soon.
Sincerely,
I am trying to practice improve writing skills by myself. The below is my essay, please give your opinion. Any idea, correction for vocabulary, grammar, structure is really appreciated. I think I still repeat the word quite much and the words are not really academic.
Thank you!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to give my opinion about the evening programs. Honestly, I have a feeling that these programs are not really interesting. Why I say this, because they are giving the less useful information for people who are being in school as me even though it is boring in some cases. I hardly find the new knowledge or advice so far. Instead of broadcasting them, I think it is better if we are able to replace by the new programs which are focus on education or sport. The viewers may be interested in in your channel, they can find a lot more good information. It is a wonderful channel if people can discover new things on the show every evening. These such programs are also attractive the parents who think their children will get many lessons or experiences base on the educational contents. Along with education we can create channels for those who love sport. If you allow live games such as football or baseball, etc. Customers are willing to pay money to subscribe for your channels. It help your station become more well-known and powerful, the business has an opportunity to develop.
That is all about my point of view. I hope I can get your feedback soon.
Sincerely,
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