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    #21

    Re: Traditional Medicine and Modern Medicine -- a Partnership

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    The current title does not help me remember this thread.
    Actually, I don't really know how to change this title's thread

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    #22

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Remember:

    medicinal herbs

    And:

    for their families

    I have corrected the first paragraph based on your correction, is it right?

    Dear Sir or Madam,
    I am writing this letter to apply for admission to the Master of XXXX Program at XXXX University. Having been interested in the field of herbal, I attended pharmacy with the specialization of herbal medicine in XXX. During my studies, I did considerable research in that field, worked as a laboratory assistant for 2 years, became a presenter in outreach program, educated villagers in East Borneo on how to plant and use herbs medicine for their family, and taken a part as a participant in international seminar held in Yogyakarta. That research in herbal medicine which I believe is what drives advances in the medical domain and, ultimately, enhances many people’s quality of life. My home country needs new ideas and mostly young medical professionals, and I want to be one of them. Thus, I would like to prepare for my career by obtaining a master degree. I have chosen to apply for the Leiden University because I really like its system of study of the outstanding and advanced teaching methods and the college's reputation as a leader in herbal medicine and how to standardize it. See it as a chance to enrich my knowledge and professionally outgrowth thereby contribute to the development of the humanity.

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    #23

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Remember:

    medicinal herbs

    And:

    for their families
    Is it different between herbal medicine and medicinal herbs?
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    #24

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Quote Originally Posted by lirisnareswari View Post
    Is it there a difference between herbal medicine and medicinal herbs?
    Note my correction to your question above.

    Yes, there is a difference. "Medicinal herbs" are herbs which can be used medicinally but might not yet have been turned into an actual medicine. "Herbal medicines" are substances which have been created so that they are ready to be taken by someone.

    I grow medicinal herbs in my garden. Once a week, I collect some of those herbs and make herbal medicine.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #25

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    OK, I will now comment on the revised paragraph. The first sentence is fine. The second and third sentences. Perhaps:

    Having been interested in the field of herbal medicine for some time, I studied pharmacy with a specialization in herbal medicine in XXXX. During my studies, I did considerable research in that field, worked as a laboratory assistant for two years, became a presenter in outreach programs, educated villagers in East Borneo on how to plant and use medicinal herbs for their families, and took part in an international seminar held in Yogyakarta.
    Last edited by Tarheel; 03-Dec-2016 at 16:23. Reason: spelling

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    #26

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    The next "sentence" is still not a sentence. Perhaps:

    I believe that research into herbal medicine is going to spur the advances medicine is going to make in the twenty-first century.

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    #27

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Next sentence. Say:

    I believe my home country needs new ideas and young medical professionals, and I want to be one of them.

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    #28

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Next sentence. Say:

    Thus, I would like to prepare for my career by earning a master's degree.

    You can use "obtaining" but I think "earning" is better.

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    #29

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Next sentence. Say:

    I have chosen to apply to Leiden University....

    I am not sure about the rest of that sentence.

    Finally:

    I see studying there as a chance to enrich my knowledge and professional growth thereby contributing of humanity


    Maybe Ems will have a comment or two.

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    #30

    Re: Please Review my Motivation Letter

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    Note my correction to your question above.

    Yes, there is a difference. "Medicinal herbs" are herbs which can be used medicinally but might not yet have been turned into an actual medicine. "Herbal medicines" are substances which have been created so that they are ready to be taken by someone.

    I grow medicinal herbs in my garden. Once a week, I collect some of those herbs and make herbal medicine.

    Ooh I see..

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