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    After a few failed tries

    Would you please take a look at my sentences from my short story and tell me if they sound natural. I am wondering about my second sentence. Is it correct as it is or should I add "while keeping." "I could do that while keeping my eyes closed."

    After a few failed tries, I had learnt to take apart my AK-47 and reassemble it, skilfully and quickly. Later, I could do that with my eyes closed.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    I think the past tense(learned) works better.
    I would add a "to" before "reassemble".
    "Do something with eyes closed" sounds better to me.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    tedmc,
    I think that one "to" in my sentence is enough. But I am not sure. We have to see what some of the teachers say.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    If you're asking if you need "to" before "reassemble", the answer is no.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    emsr2d2,
    I am asking about my whole sentence. Is it correct to write "I could do that with my eyes closed." or do I have to add "while keeping."? "I could do that while keeping my eyes closed. "

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    I was referring to the contents of post 3. That's all I was commenting on in post 4.

    I would change "that" to "it" in "Later, I could do it with my eyes closed". That's more natural than "while keeping".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    I understand emsr 2d2.

    The problem is that tedmc wants to help me, but her or his answer was not clear. Sometimes you need the help of a native speaker because only a native speaker can understand the subtle differences in words. What is the use of getting help when the answer you receive is not clear?
    Last edited by Bassim; 03-Dec-2016 at 14:58.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    Bassim
    Which part of my post is not clear?
    Yes, the second "to" is optional but I would put it in.
    In the second sentence, I think "that", as in the original sentence is also acceptable.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    tedmc,

    A few years ago, I got a warning by the moderator because I told you not to answer my posts. The moderator told me that what I had written was an insult because everyone has the right to post answers and give advice on this forum. Since then, I am trying to avoid any kinds of discussions on this forum, because I do not want to got more warnings or become banned. I am a learner and I am here to learn English and not to quarrel with people. You write in your post "I think", but one thing is when you say "I think" and another "I know."

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    Re: After a few failed tries

    Lots of us use "I think" on this forum. In BrE at least, it's another way of saying "In my opinion".

    I agree with tedmc's suggestion that "learned" would be better, unless the surrounding sentences make the past perfect more appropriate.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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