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  1. Key Member
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    #1

    Jolted out of their lethargy

    These two sentences are from my text I am currently writing. I am not sure if they sound natural. Would you please take a look at them and correct my grammar and punctuation.

    Jolted out of their lethargy, the inhabitants stare at the strangers, asking themselves what the hullabaloo is about. As they seldom watch Swedish TV and rare read newspapers, they wonder who that squat man is, accompanied by bulky bodyguards with sunglasses and earpieces.

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    #2

    Re: Jolted out of their lethargy

    The adverb before "read" is rarely.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #3

    Re: Jolted out of their lethargy

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    These two sentences are from my a text I am currently writing. I am not sure if they sound natural. Would you please take a look at them and correct my grammar and punctuation?

    Jolted out of their lethargy, the inhabitants stare at the strangers, asking themselves what (all) the hullabaloo is about. As they seldom watch Swedish TV and rarely read newspapers, they wonder who that squat man is, accompanied by bulky bodyguards with sunglasses and earpieces.
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    #4

    Re: Jolted out of their lethargy

    Say:

    ...accompanied by bodyguards wearing sunglasses and earpieces.


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