[Essay] The advantages and disadvantages of special homes for the elderly

[hai_lua_t2]

Hi all,
Please support me improve the below essay with topic as title.

Home for elderly is always a problem in our modern life. In order to deal with this issue, many governments applied a policy called special homes. Obviously, there are many advantages we can see from this policy.

Firstly, old people have a better living condition in such those homes. They have chance to access to heath services not only by government but also offered by private companies which deliver high quality of treatment to improve health for them. For patients, who are facing with serious diseases are taken care by nurses everyday without going to hospital. Moreover, in case of emergency if the old people have any health issue suddenly, they can get treatment timely. Another good point of special homes is freedom. They can share hobby with the others. This is really difficult to do if they are living in a big family. For example, watching a favorite television program or feeding pets.

By contrast, special home also has disadvantages. One of the issues is loneliness that we can easily find from those homes. The elderly usually feel that they are abandoned by relatives. This leads to serious problem is depression. If this happens, it is better to let them keep living with family and relatives should spend more time to take them care. They might feel uncomfortable or bored without family as well. There are no kids for to play, hardly to share feelings which they used to share with relatives. If the staff in special homes do not know their character will cause misunderstanding, uncomfortable. As a result, they are not happy to live in there anymore.

In conclusion, special home is a good solution in a modern society. But we need to consider the negative effects that it might cause for our senior citizens. As well as, we should visit them frequently while they are living in there.

 

[emsr2d2]

When are you going to submit your essay to your teacher/tutor?

 

[hai_lua_t2]

Hi emsr2d2 - moderator,

I'm not going to submit this to everyone and I think I will never. So the due day is INDEFINITE. I just write for myself. There is no certification here. This topic take at Page 82 - Barron's IELTS book. I think you might misunderstand.

Anyway, thank you for your contribution.

 

[emsr2d2]

Hi all,
Please [STRIKE]support[/STRIKE] help me improve the [STRIKE]below[/STRIKE] essay below. [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] The topic [STRIKE]as[/STRIKE] is in the title.

[STRIKE]Home for[/STRIKE] Housing the elderly is [STRIKE]always[/STRIKE] a problem in [STRIKE]our[/STRIKE] modern life. In order to deal with this issue, many governments have applied a policy called "Special homes". Obviously, there are many advantages [STRIKE]we can see from[/STRIKE] to this policy.

[STRIKE]Firstly,[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]old[/STRIKE] Elderly people have [STRIKE]a[/STRIKE] better living conditions in such [STRIKE]those[/STRIKE] homes. They [STRIKE]have chance to[/STRIKE] can access [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] health services, provided not only by the government but also [STRIKE]offered[/STRIKE] by private companies, which deliver high-quality [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] treatment to improve their health. [STRIKE]for them.[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]For[/STRIKE] Patients (no comma here) who are facing [STRIKE]with[/STRIKE] serious diseases are taken care of by nurses [STRIKE]everyday[/STRIKE] every day, without going to hospital. Moreover, in case of emergency health issues, [STRIKE]if the old people have any health issue suddenly,[/STRIKE] they can get timely treatment. [STRIKE]timely.[/STRIKE]

Another good [STRIKE]point[/STRIKE] aspect of "special homes" is freedom. [STRIKE]They[/STRIKE] Residents can share [STRIKE]hobby[/STRIKE] hobbies such as watching TV or looking after pets, with the others. This is really difficult to do if they are living in a big family. [STRIKE]For example, watching a favorite television program or feeding pets.[/STRIKE]

By contrast, "special homes" also [STRIKE]has[/STRIKE] have disadvantages. One of the issues found most often is loneliness. [STRIKE]that we can easily find from those homes.[/STRIKE] The elderly usually feel that they [STRIKE]are[/STRIKE] have been abandoned by their relatives. This leads to serious problem [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] such as depression. If this happens, it is better to let them keep living with family, [STRIKE]and[/STRIKE] where their relatives [STRIKE]should[/STRIKE] can spend more time [STRIKE]to[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]take them care[/STRIKE] taking care of them. Also, they might feel uncomfortable or bored without family. [STRIKE]as well.[/STRIKE] There are no kids for them to play with, [STRIKE]hardly[/STRIKE] and it's hard for them to share feelings which they used to share with relatives. If the staff in special homes do not know [STRIKE]their[/STRIKE] the residents' characters, [STRIKE]will cause[/STRIKE] there can be misunderstandings. [STRIKE]uncomfortable.[/STRIKE] As a result, [STRIKE]they[/STRIKE] the elderly people [STRIKE]are[/STRIKE] might not be happy to live [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] there anymore.

In conclusion, "special homes" [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] are a good solution in a modern society but we need to consider the negative effects that [STRIKE]it[/STRIKE] they might cause for our senior citizens. [STRIKE]As well as,[/STRIKE] We should visit them frequently while they are living [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] there.

See above.

 

[teechar]

Hi all,
Please [STRIKE]support[/STRIKE] help me improve the [STRIKE]below[/STRIKE] essay below. [STRIKE]with topic as title.[/STRIKE]

[STRIKE] Home[/STRIKE] Providing suitable accommodation for the elderly is a major challenge for many societies. [STRIKE]always a problem in our modern life.[/STRIKE] In order to deal with this issue, many governments have [STRIKE]applied[/STRIKE] adopted a policy [STRIKE]called[/STRIKE] of providing special homes for elderly people. [STRIKE]Obviously,[/STRIKE] There are many advantages, but also some disadvantages, to such a [STRIKE]we can see from this[/STRIKE] policy.

Firstly, old people have [STRIKE]a better[/STRIKE] reasonable, and often good, living conditions in such those homes. They often have [STRIKE]chance to[/STRIKE] ready access to heath services not only by the government but also [STRIKE]offered[/STRIKE] by private companies which deliver high-quality [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] treatment to improve their health. [STRIKE]for them. For[/STRIKE] Patients who [STRIKE]are facing with[/STRIKE] have serious and/or chronic diseases are taken care of by nurses [STRIKE]everyday[/STRIKE] at such homes without the need to go [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] to hospital. Moreover, in case of emergency if [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] old people have any health issue suddenly, they can get timely treatment. [STRIKE]timely.[/STRIKE] Another good point [STRIKE]of[/STRIKE] about those special homes for old people is the freedom they offer. [STRIKE]They[/STRIKE] Residents can share their hobbies and interests with [STRIKE]the[/STRIKE] other like-minded people. This is really difficult to do if they are living alone or even with their children's families. [STRIKE]in a big family.[/STRIKE] For example, they can watch [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] a favorite television program in a group or feed [STRIKE]ing[/STRIKE] pets together.

[STRIKE]By contrast, special[/STRIKE] On the other hand, old people's homes also have certain disadvantages. One of the issues is the loneliness that we can easily find [STRIKE]from[/STRIKE] in many of those homes. The elderly people living there usually feel that they are abandoned by their relatives. This leads to serious problems [STRIKE]is[/STRIKE] such as depression. If this happens, it is better to let them [STRIKE]keep living[/STRIKE] live with family, and relatives should spend more time to take [STRIKE]them[/STRIKE] care of them. They might feel uncomfortable or bored [STRIKE]without[/STRIKE] when living away from their family as well. There are no kids for them to play with, and it's hard for them [STRIKE]ly[/STRIKE] to share their feelings which they used to share with their relatives. If the staff in special homes do not know their [STRIKE]character[/STRIKE] likes and dislikes, that can [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] cause misunderstanding, and make for an uncomfortable stay at the home. [STRIKE]As a result, they are not happy to live in there anymore.[/STRIKE]

In conclusion, having special homes for the elderly is a good solution in a modern society. But we need to consider the negative effects that it might cause for our senior citizens. [STRIKE]As well as,[/STRIKE] In addition, we should visit them frequently while they are living [STRIKE]in[/STRIKE] there.

Cross-posted.
@hai_lua_t2: What more do you want? ;-)

 

[hai_lua_t2]

Is it okay if I write a sentence as below:

---->No matter how it is, losing some time for a good meal is still better than saving time with fast food.

Or

---->No matter how it is, taking some time for a good meal is still better than saving time with fast food.

which one is better?

 

[tedmc]

I would say:

No matter what (it is), spending some time cooking a good meal is better than saving time going for fast food.

To me,"no matter how it is/no matter what" doesn't mean much, unless you have a context which requires it.

You are advised to start a new thread on a new question, though I have given you a reply here.