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    #1

    The man refused to shake hands

    I feel that something is wrong with my sentence, but I can not point out the mistake. Would you please take a look at it and correct my mistakes?

    The man refused to shake hands with the president, as he declared, because of his political conviction.

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    Re: The man refused to shake hands

    You're right. It's not correct. However, I'm having trouble correcting it because I'm not sure what you're trying to say. In "as he declared", who is he? What did he declare?

    A very simple way to make it a grammatical sentence is to remove "as". However, I'm not sure if the resulting sentence conveys your intended meaning.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The man refused to shake hands

    Would my sentence be correct if I rephrase it like this?

    The man told the journalist that he refused to shake hands with the president because of his political conviction.

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    #4

    Re: The man refused to shake hands

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would my sentence be correct if I rephrase it like this?

    The man told the journalist that he refused to shake hands with the president because of his political convictions.
    It's grammatically correct with my addition, but still logically ambiguous. We can't tell whether the man's or the president's convictions are the issue, though of course the convictions of both would affect the decision.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: The man refused to shake hands

    Would this sentence bring more clarity to my meaning?

    The man told the journalist that he refused to shake hands with the president because of his own political convictions.

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    #6

    Re: The man refused to shake hands

    Yes.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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