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    #1

    Despite rapid deterioration

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    Despite rapid deterioration of David's health, he was not admitted to hospital in time -- the error which almost cost him his life.

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    #2

    Re: Despite rapid deterioration

    The question which comes to mind is:

    In time for what?

    Perhaps:

    Despite the rapid deterioration of David's health, several hours elapsed before he was admitted to hospital. The delay almost cost him his life.

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