[Grammar] Kevin, I tried to apologize! Once I was with my mother in the mall

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following sentences grammatically correct?


"Kevin, I tried to apologize! Once I was with my mother in the mall. You were at the music store with your father. I look directly into your eyes. On another occasion, I come close to you and stared into your eyes a few seconds. I didn't insist because I didn't know you well. I didn`t knew how you might react."


Thanks.

 

[teechar]

Kevin, I tried to apologize! Once, I was with my mother in the mall. You were [STRIKE]at[/STRIKE] in the music store there with your father. I looked directly into your eyes. On another occasion, I came close to you and stared into your eyes for a few seconds. I didn't [STRIKE]insist[/STRIKE] persist because I didn't know you well then. I didn't know how you might react.

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