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    Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Would you please correct my mistakes?

    Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow, struggling to keep their footing on the icy streets and mounds of hard snow.

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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    The only thing that grates slightly on me is the repetition of the word "snow" but I'm having trouble coming up with a decent rewording. Well done for using "passersby", rather than the common, but incorrect, "passerbys"!
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    Would it be correct to use "blizzard" instead of snow, although I know that blizzard means snowstorm?

    Frozen passersby hurried through the morning blizzard, struggling to keep their footing on the icy streets and mounds of hard snow.

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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would it be correct to use "blizzard" instead of snow, although I know that blizzard means snowstorm?

    Frozen passersby hurried through the morning blizzard, struggling to keep their footing on the icy streets and mounds of hard snow.
    It's okay if you want the storm to be a blizzard -- which is a rare, extremely intense snow and wind storm.
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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    You can take some liberties: Frozen passersby hurried through the wintry mix of weather, struggling to keep their footing on the icy streets and hard-packed snow.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    If you don't want to impose the full force of the storm on them, your passersby could hurry through the near-blizzard.
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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    If they were really frozen they wouldn't be moving. I think you can find a better word than "Frozen" there. Is the wind blowing hard? Perhaps:

    Struggling against the icy wind, the passersby walked through the snowstorm and tried to keep their footing on the slippery, snow-packed sidewalks.

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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow on the streets, struggling to keep their footing on the icy streets roads and mounds of hard snow.

    I don't get to experience snow where I am from, but I thought snow is always soft. It is ice that is hard.

    Can you say "people are frozen"?
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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    I don't get to experience snow where I am from, but I thought snow is always soft. It is ice that is hard.

    Can you say "people are frozen"?
    Snow can be packed until it's hard and icy. The snowballs that snowmen are made from consist of that kind of snow.

    You can say people are frozen when speaking metaphorically.
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    Re: Frozen passersby hurried through the morning snow

    Both snow and ice are slippery. And, no, I wouldn't describe people as frozen. However, the weather could be described as freezing.

    Sometimes you have snow on top of ice. Try walking on that! Talk about slippery! And there are different kinds of snow. Some kinds are wetter than others. And it gets hard-packed after people have been walking on it for a while. Then there is slush. It's snow that hasn't quite melted.

    Here we are talking about walking through a cold wind that is blowing snow in your face.

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