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    Cover letter

    HI all,
    i need someone to correct my cover latter (CL) in grammar or maybe there some missing point. to get this CL properly in order . i am open for any suggestion and opinion about my CL .
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    Dear Mr.

    Hi, my name is Frederick Taka i am 35 years old Indonesian welder i am looking for a sponsor because i dont have permit yet to work in Canada
    . My experience in welding is more than 4 years.
    Since January 2016 i am open my own welding shop and manage it together with my friend. Our job is
    Make or fabricated a fences,gates,racks and other commercial structure. Before it i worked with
    Company named PT.Vorkon as a welder from 2007. Vorkon is man Power Company I had worked with other company (user) Under the Vorkon company.
    Our user is Mi SWACO,bukaka,tatamulya,and more.most of the company i had worked
    With has main duty in construction buildings, bridges and towers. More information you can find in my resume letter

    I have Canadian experienced, as a carrier in local newspaper company in Vancouver.To make my own distribution company is become my goal at that time
    but before I can achieve my goal my refugee claimant rejected by the Canadian government I got departure order. So I have to go back home to my country Indonesia
    and I have been cooperative with the Canadian government till all process finished. (2010-2014) it is means i am not deported and can go back to Canada
    in normal manner.

    Canada has more opportunity for the future compared to my country.
    Thatís the reason I am motivated to go back to Canada. i have applied for a visitor visa and will be available in Vancouver around January and February 2017.

    I am continuing working as a welder in Indonesia. 4 years not holding a welding holder does not make me changing track to choose other job. Until now I am still doing it and I am happy with it.

    I have interest in a new challenge, and commit myself to do the best; i have ears that always open for any input to make me better in doing my job.
    Please review my resume in there I put my link to my welding demo videos and other documents that needed.
    (Police record, welding certificate, and more)

    Best regards
    Frederick Taka

    NOTE : if there is welding procedure specification WPS from you i would like to make a video demo of it live by skype or offline anything you preferred.
    Wages are negotiable.

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    I am open to any suggestions and will listen to any opinions.

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    My name is Frederick Tata, and I am a thirtyfive-year-old Indonesian welder.

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    Re: Cover letter

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
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    My name is Frederick Tata, and I am a thirtyfive-year-old Indonesian welder.
    I like to write double digits as numbers:

    ... I am a 35-year-old Indonesian welder.

    In any case, "35" should not be written as one word.
    NOT A TEACHER. Translator and editor, and I hold a TESOL certificate. Native speaker of American English (West Coast)

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    Re: Cover letter

    Quote Originally Posted by bubbha View Post
    I like to write double digits as numbers:

    ... I am a 35-year-old Indonesian welder.

    In any case, "35" should not be written as one word.
    I would normally write that as a number myself.

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    I am looking for a sponsor because I don't have a permit yet to work in Canada.

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    I have more than four years of experience in welding.

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    Since January 2016 I have been operating my own welding shop. I manage it together with my friiend. We fabricate fences, gates, racks, and other commercial structures.

    (I am not certain I have used "fabricate" correctly.)

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    Before that I worked as a welder for PT Vorkon from 2007 to 2016.

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    I don't understand the rest of that paragraph except for the last sentence. Say:

    You can find more information in my resume.

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