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    #1

    Anna was without any work experience

    Would you please help me and correct the mistakes in my sentence? I feel that something is wrong with my construction, but I cannot point exactly where is the mistake.

    Anna was without any work experience, but with an attractive body, which probably helped her to land a job as a secretary.

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    #2

    Re: Anna was without any work experience

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would you please help me and correct the mistakes in my sentence? I feel that something is wrong with my construction, but I cannot point exactly where is the mistake.

    Anna was without any work experience, but with an attractive body, which probably helped her to land a job as a secretary.
    Anna had no work experience but did have an attractive body which probably helped her land a job as a secretary.

    I won't comment on the social correctness or veracity of the sentence.
    I am not a teacher.

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    #3

    Re: Anna was without any work experience

    I would change the "with" to "had".

    Also, the object (the mistake) should be before the verb - ..where the mistake is.
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    #4

    Re: Anna was without any work experience

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Would you please help me and correct the mistakes in my sentence? I feel that something is wrong with my construction, but I cannot point can't exactly point to where is the mistake is.

    Anna was without any work experience, but with she had an attractive body, which probably helped her to land a job as a secretary.
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