Spoonerism Distich

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Mendicant



What people freely gave into my hat,
never reached my piggybank on the „high mat“.

[German original:

Was die Leute mir in den Hut gaben,
bewirkte bei mir auch kein Guthaben.]


Highly praiseworthy poetry community of all the English Speaking World,
does one of you only love this my spoonerism distich of German origin?

I, indeed, will be most appreciative if he/she would magnanimously burnish my weak English equivalent...

Yours

poetry_beak
 
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Translating a couplet from one language into another and it still rhymes is a remarkable feat.
 
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OP, can you make it scan, too? The second line has one too many syllables.
 

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How many is too many?
 

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In this case, eleven. The original meter has ten syllables per line. The first line of the translation matches that, but the second has one too many.
 

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I promised my Facebook pals a couplet every day for 2017. I did not promise them that the lines would have an equal number of syllables.
 

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What people in my hat so gave
Allowed me not I could go save
 

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This definition will forgive you, grudgingly. It does say especially a pair that rhyme and are of the same length though, so watch out for the poetry patrol.
 

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You could use ne'er instead of never.
 

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Check out the couplets thread.
 
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