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    #21

    Re: Freedom, part six

    Fifth paragraph. Say:

    The nature around me was comforting, but my mind raced with thoughts. Everything had been happening so fast: the war, my imprisonment in a prison camp, my release, months spent in fear, and then my journey to Sweden.

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    #22

    Re: Freedom, part six

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    One day I had everything I needed: family, friends, a house, and a beautiful orchard. The next day I had only what I could fit in my small canvas bag.

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    #23

    Re: Freedom, part six

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    It belongs geographically and politically to Europe, but I felt I had ended up in a desolate place where I was never going to be happy.

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    #24

    Re: Freedom, part six

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    I wondered if I would ever be able to speak that language fluently and how long it would take to learn its basics.

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    #25

    Re: Freedom, part six

    Seventh paragraph. Perhaps:

    I swam underwater and didn't concern myself with where I would end up.

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    #26

    Re: Freedom, part six

    Tarheel,
    Regarding your post No 25 I think that teechar's version is better. In your version it means that I was completely immersed in the water, but I wanted to say that I held my head under the surface of the water.

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    #27

    Re: Freedom, part six

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    Tarheel,
    Regarding your post No 25 I think that teechar's version is better. In your version it means that I was completely immersed in the water, but I wanted to say that I held my head under the surface of the water.
    OK. Perhaps:

    My head was under the water, and I couldn't see where I was going, but I didn't care.

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    #28

    Re: Freedom, part six

    Tarheel,

    It is all right. Thank you again for going through this text. I am really grateful to you and teechar. I hope that these small mistakes I still make will one day disappear when I manage to polish my English. But think what I great job you two have done by correcting all these texts and teaching me your mother tongue.

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    #29

    Re: Freedom, part six

    I think we did a good job on this one.

    Bedtime!

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