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    The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural. Would you please correct my mistakes? Do I need "he" in the second part of my second sentence?

    The old bearded man wore a straw hat and held a long stick to support himself. He wandered the winding path that led to the summit, and he seemed in harmony with the mountain.

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    Re: The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    I might be inclined to put a comma after "straw hat" just so it doesn't appear that he both wore the straw hat and carried the stick to support himself. Other than that, I'm happy with it.

    The "he" halfway through the second sentence is optional.

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    Re: The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    emsr2d2,
    I started to read a great book about herbs written by an American writer John Lust. It is called "The Herb Book." He describes the moment when he was a child and went with his uncle Dr. Benedict Lust in the mountains to look for herbs. One of his sentences is: "He seems in harmony with the natural beauty that surrounds him." So I tried to make my own sentence just to see if I can use the phrase "in harmony with the mountain."

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    Re: The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    I like the sound of Dr Lust. Purely because I love herbs, you understand!
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    #5

    Re: The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    I'd prefer 'bearded old man' versus 'old bearded man'. It seems a more natural order of adjectives to my ear, although that's a matter of opinion.
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    Re: The old bearded man wore a straw hat

    emsr2d2,
    I love herbs too. I grew up with them. In my home in Bosnia we always preferred natural remedies and herbs to pills. But here in Sweden, I see that people do not know much about herbs. They prefer to take tablets instead, which I think is a pity. They have become spoiled.

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