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    Lightbulb Grammar

    Hello everyone, this is my first essay. And I am practicing writing english, any comments are welcome. Please score and correct my essay. Thank you so much.




    You know, computers are very popular in the world. By using computers people can makes friends, share informations, learn something new and study together. And you can say that computer can do everything for you.
    Now in looking back, about ten years ago, the first time I learn how to use computer, you know that at that time I ran into a lot of problems, because everything are being new for me, it is really hard to use it. I ask my farther for help, luckily he knows it, and he taught me the basic. I really happy with that, soon after about 2 months I got farmiliar with it, and you know from that time I can use computer whenever I want.
    But now, I can say that I know everything about computer, I have been working with computers or playing game. And I realize that if you use computer for work it will help you a lot, hard work will become easier./

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    Re: Grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by QuanLe View Post
    Hello everyone, this is my first essay. And I am practising writing in English. Any comments are welcome. Please score and correct my essay. Thank you so much.
    Hello QuanLe, and welcome to the forum.

    What was the essay question, and where did you get it?

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    Re: Grammar

    Hello teechar.

    There are no any questions. That is my personal idea about computers.

    Please correct my essay, teechar.

    Thanks.

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    Re: Grammar

    Before we continue, please check the information in your member profile, particularly the Current Location section. If it is not accurate, please correct it.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Lightbulb Re: Grammar

    Hello emsr2d2, I am Vietnamese people, now I work in Japan.
    I will come back to Vietnam in May this year. That is why I set my location in Vietnam.

    I will reset my location now.

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    Re: Grammar

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    I am Vietnamese, and I am currently working in Japan. I will go back to Vietnam in May of this year. That is why I set my location as Vietnam.

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    Re: Grammar

    It doesn't mean anything to say that computers are popular. Perhaps:

    Computers are in very wide use all over the world

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    Re: Grammar

    Perhaps:

    By using computers people can make friends, share information, and learn things.

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    Re: Grammar

    Say:

    Computers are in many devices.

    Get out of the habit of using "you know".

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    About ten years ago I learned how to use a computer. I had a lot of problems because everything was new to me.

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