[Grammar] Taylor walked from side to side of the street very anxious.

[Nikitus]

Hello.

Are the following dialogues grammatically correct?

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Taylor walked from side to side of the street very anxious.


-"Calm down Sir. I know him and his modus operandi very well. When you had deposited the money?", Brad said.

-"Today, early in the morning.", Taylor replied.

-"We are still on time. I can help you to get your money back. But you have to help my friend Kevin first."


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Thanks!.

 

[Tarheel]

I don't know. Maybe.

You may thank me now.

 

[Tarheel]

Try:

Taylor walked back and forth, anxiety written all over his face.

 

[Tarheel]

Rewrite.

When did you deposit the money?

 

[emsr2d2]

Taylor walked from side to side of the street very anxious.
Taylor walked anxiously from one side of the street to the other.

"Calm down, sir. I know him and his modus operandi very well. When did you [STRIKE]had[/STRIKE] [STRIKE]deposited[/STRIKE] deposit the money?", Brad said/asked.

"Today, early in the morning (no full stop here)", Taylor replied.

"We are still on time. I can help you to get your money back but you have to help my friend Kevin first."

See above.

 

[Tarheel]

Note that you shouldn't capitalize "sir" here. Capitalize that word only when it is used as a title.

 

[Tarheel]

Dictionary.com gives ten examples of the use of "dialogue". I suggest that you follow their example. (They don't pluralize it once.)

www.dictionary.com

As for your question, I suggest:

Would you correct the grammar in the following sentences?

Or:

Please correct the grammar in the following sentences.