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    #1

    The car swerved and skidded

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    The car swerved and skidded to avoid the dog who stopped dead in the lane, staring at the driver, as if hypnotised by the headlights.

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    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    Skidding would be a result of swerving, not a tactic for avoiding something.
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    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    If I delete "skidding" would me sentence be correct?

    The car swerved to avoid the dog who stopped dead in the lane, staring at the driver, as if hypnotised by the headlights.

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    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    If I delete "skidding" would me sentence be correct?

    The car swerved to avoid the dog who stopped dead in the lane, staring at the driver, as if hypnotised by the headlights.
    I'd remove the comma after "driver". Some people will tell you to use "which" instead of "who" on the basis that a dog isn't a person. I disagree. I use "who" for animals most of the time.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    I'd definitely use 'which' or 'that'.

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    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    The car swerved and skidded to avoid the dog who stopped dead in the lane, staring at the driver, as if hypnotised by the headlights.
    To get all of your timings correct I would write the following. This allows for the skidding to occur after the swerving, and uses "had" to indicate that the dog was already stopped and not in the act of stopping. And, unless we've already met the dog I switched "the dog" to "a dog".

    "The car skidded after swerving to avoid a dog who had stopped dead in the lane, staring at the driver as if hypnotised by the headlights."

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    #7

    Re: The car swerved and skidded

    BobGerr,

    Thank you for your contribution. Your sentence describes exactly what I wished to say from the beginning.

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