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    A woman with straight blond hair

    Would you please correct the mistakes in these two sentences. They are from a text I am currently writing. I am trying to describe a woman doing a demonstration of a machine in a shopping mall.

    A woman with straight blonde hair was doing demonstration of a kitchen machine. She was talking in a microphone and at the same time pressing the buttons with her slender fingers, which caused the machine to run on different speed.

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    Re: A woman with straight blond hair

    A woman with straight blonde hair was doing a demonstration of a kitchen machine. She was talking into a microphone and, at the same time, pressing the buttons with her slender fingers, which caused the machine to run at different speeds.

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    Re: A woman with straight blond hair

    She would have been doing a demonstration of a machine. More naturally, she would simply have been demonstrating it.

    She was talking into a microphone. The buttons aren't mentioned before they're described, so it would be more natural to omit the definite article: she was just pressing buttons. (If you write "pressing the buttons", the reader wonders "What buttons? Did someone mention buttons?")
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    Re: A woman with straight blond hair

    I am wondering if my sentence, with all your corrections, would be correct like this:

    A woman with straight blond hair was demonstrating a kitchen machine. She was talking into a microphone and, at the same time, pressing buttons with her slender fingers, which caused the machine to run at different speeds.

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    #5

    Re: A woman with straight blond hair

    It's grammatically correct now.

    I notice that you changed the spelling of blond. A woman with blond hair should be called a blonde but, as you've done in post #4, the hair color should be spelled blond.
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    #6

    Re: A woman with straight blond hair

    You run the risk of having the reader assume the machine ran at different speeds because the woman had slender fingers.

    You could simply state, "She was talking into a microphone and at the same time pressing buttons...."

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