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    Someone played the flute

    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural.

    Someone played the flute, and then the sound died away in the night. Soon nothing could be heard but the rustle of the wind in treetops.

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    Re: Someone played the flute

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if my sentences sound natural.

    Someone played the flute, and then the sound died away into the night. Soon nothing could be heard but the rustle of the wind in the treetops.
    See above. I can't put my finger on why but "Someone played the flute" sounds a little clunky/dull. Having said that, I can't think of a better way to put it. Maybe "The sound of a flute briefly filled the air but then died away into the night". A flute doesn't play itself so it's not really necessary to point out that someone was playing it.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: Someone played the flute

    Perhaps:

    I could hear the sound of a flute being played -- a pleasant melody.it was all too brief. One minute there was the sound of the flute wafting on the air. The next minute it wasn't there. There was only the wind rustling in the treetops.

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    Re: Someone played the flute

    Tarheel,

    I have to say that emsr2d2' version is the best. "The sound of a flute briefly filled the air but then died away into the night." It is concise, and when you read it, you can almost hear a flute playing and imagine the dark night into which the sound disappears.

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    Re: Someone played the flute

    I (briefly) heard a flute until it died away (or faded away), leaving only the wind rustling through the treetops.
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