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The prompt is: The day I decided to change my life
The prompt I got of the internet for a practice, but can you grade it as a introduction of an selective school essay, around high year 9 standard. Also include what I could do to improve and does it need to be longer? (Note: We only get to write an essay in 15 mins). Any feed back is appreciated.
Put bluntly I was a loner. I never had that much friends or none for that matter of a fact, but I didn't care until I met her. When I confesssed she rejected me harshly and said who would ever love me. That day was the day I decided to change my life.
The prompt I got of the internet for a practice, but can you grade it as a introduction of an selective school essay, around high year 9 standard. Also include what I could do to improve and does it need to be longer? (Note: We only get to write an essay in 15 mins). Any feed back is appreciated.
Put bluntly I was a loner. I never had that much friends or none for that matter of a fact, but I didn't care until I met her. When I confesssed she rejected me harshly and said who would ever love me. That day was the day I decided to change my life.
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