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    A tiny story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

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    I have translated a short story from Tamil magazines. Please check for any mistakes and make any necessary corrections and modifications.

    Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox) - Part I


    In a dense green jungle lion, wolf and fox, three live with the utmost solidarity. They were sharing their food whoever brought it. But the sharing shouldn’t hurt the lion’s mind which was as a law of lion. The food sharing was in line with their strength and catching abilities.

    One day all three animals left their habitat in search of food. Within a few minutes the lion chase a deer and caught it. The fox caught a couple of wild fowl for his part. But, wolf couldn’t find anything. Wolf thought in mind and satisfied that he would get a share eventhough who can't catch any prey. Lion and fox dragged their prey and reached to the habitat. They caught more than what usually they expected.

    Lion said to wolf “divide this prey.” But, wolf hesitates to divide as who hadn’t bring for his part, said his opinion to the lion.

    Wolf! “ It is true that you couldn’t bring any prey. However, usually we could share and eat the food in regardless of whoever brought it. You have your share, isn’t it? Why are you hesitating? “ divide this prey” asked lion.

    After hearing from lion, wolf thought that may be lion is instructing him to divide half of his share. Based on this, wolf has divided lion’s share into three. When lion saw that share got angry. A hungry lion raged over the wolf and kill it and ate it.
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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Say:

    In a dense green jungle, a lion, a wolf and a fox lived together.

    It should be a short story and not a tiny story.

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Say:

    Any food that one of them caught was shared with the others.

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Perhaps:

    Angry with the wolf, the lion killed it and ate it.

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    The lion is always going to get the lion's share regardless.

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    There is much that I won't be able to comment on, because I just don't understand it.

    Next (second) paragraph). Say:

    One day all three animals left the den in search of food.

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Say:

    Within a few minutes the lion chased a deer and caught it.

    (Of course, in real life a lion wouldn't catch anything that way.)

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    Re: A tiny story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    A habitat is something you can't leave.

    www.dictionary.com

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Say:

    The fox caught a couple of birds.

    How does a fox carry two birds?

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    Re: A Short Story - Food sharing (Lion, wolf and fox)

    Say:

    But the wolf couldn't find anything. However, the wolf was satisfied that he would get his share no matter what.

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