The Australian Computer Society and The British Computer Society

[english_learn]

I am an IT professional whose qualifications and skills have been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society. I am well organized, energetic, dedicated and expert in successfully managing large complex multi-billion-dollar flagship projects in both private and public sectors in Asia, Australia and the Middle East

(Edit by mod: This isn't the original post #1, which was deleted by the OP. This is a copy of post #7 so that there is at least something contained in post #1.)

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Grammar check

It's not a complete sentence. In addition, the word order at the start is confusing. Do you mean "The IT professional who has been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society ..."?

 

[GoesStation]

Re: Grammar check

Can you write a simple sentence that leaves out all the details but says generally what you want to say here? Replace Australian Computer Society and The British Computer Society certified IT professional with the single word "person" and leave out the place names. Once you've constructed that sentence, you can put the details back.

 

[emsr2d2]

Note that I have changed your thread title. Titles should include some/all of the words/phrases you are querying. Generic titles such as "Grammar check" are useless - make every title individual and relevant to its specific thread.

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

Dear Teacher,

I have updated, there are two sentences now,but i would like to make them as one.

It's not a complete sentence. In addition, the word order at the start is confusing. Do you mean "The IT professional who has been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society ..."?

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Grammar check

Please don't go back and edit post #1 after it has received responses. It now makes the responses look like nonsense! If you're asked to revise something, please post the new version in a new response.

I have looked at your new version. The first thing you need to do is check the difference between "who's" and "whose".

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

Thanks , please see below

I am an IT professional whose qualifications and skills have been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society. I am well organized, energetic, dedicated and expert in successfully managing large complex multi-billion-dollar flagship projects in both private and public sectors in Asia, Australia and the Middle East

Please don't go back and edit post #1 after it has received responses. It now makes the responses look like nonsense! If you're asked to revise something, please post the new version in a new response.

I have looked at your new version. The first thing you need to do is check the difference between "who's" and "whose".

 

[teechar]

Re: Grammar check

"... the private and the public, etc."
"... the Middle East."

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

"... the private and the public, etc."
"... the Middle East."

Thanks , how can make both sentences into one ?

 

[teechar]

Re: Grammar check

Thanks. How can I merge both sentences into one?

Which two sentences do you mean?

I note you've been a member since 2010 and you've only clicked Thank/Like once!

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

I meant the below sentences please .Thanks

I am an IT professional whose qualifications and skills have been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society. I am well organized, energetic, dedicated and expert in successfully managing large complex multi-billion-dollar flagship projects in both the private and the public sectors in Asia, Australia and the Middle East.

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Grammar check

There are too many words to neatly turn that into one sentence. However, if someone forced me to do it, I'd have to write:

Well-organized, energetic, dedicated and an expert in successfully managing large complex multi-billion-dollar flagship projects in both the private and the public sectors in Asia, Australia and the Middle East, I am an IT professional whose qualifications and skills have been certified by both the Australian Computer Society and the British Computer Society.

(Note my addition of a hyphen and an indefinite article.)

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

Many thanks

How would you neatly turn that into one sentence?

 

[english_learn]

Re: Grammar check

Please delete this thread

 

[emsr2d2]

Re: Grammar check

Many thanks
How would you neatly turn that into one sentence?

I already turned it into one sentence in post #12.

Please delete this thread

No. It is clearly stated at the top of the first page of this forum that threads here cannot be deleted. I have already reinserted text into post #1 because you had deleted the contents.

This thread is now closed.