[Essay] Review writing. Grammar correction needed

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I would be really thankful if someone would check my review for grammar mistakes. Please be so kind and help me with that.

My review today will be based on book “Xenophobe's Guide to the Russians” written by Vladimir Zhelvis, which was published in 2001. Xenophobe's Guides and the Lingo Learners series highlight the unique characters, behaviors, life and language nuances of different nations. This book helps to get familiar with the particular nation or culture.
At the beginning of the book everything seems okay and being familiar with Russian culture, nothing is actually wondering in the context. But as deep you go through this book the more you understand, that the author sticks to standard ethnical myths about Russians: that all Russians do nothing but drink vodka day and night, that Russian school education is best in the world, that children are brought up by bad-looking but loving “babushkas”, that under socialism one would go to a concentration camp for any expression of dissenting political views, etc. In a fact, you will learn how the poor lived in central Russia 20-30 years ago. Most changes in the lifestyle are ignored (may be due to the author's age). Moscow, Saint-Petersburg and the South live quite differently from what he is telling us. The emerging middle class is disregarded, you only get unfunny jokes about the new rich. Russian humor is also misrepresented in the book: it is far way more subtle and delicate.
Overall, it is very unlikely that an average tourist would meet the people described in the book. On a positive side I can note that many historical facts presented in the book are not widely known even by native Russians. As a tourist guide for someone going to the country the book is not really helpful. That’s why i would strongly recommend not buying this book.
 
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It looks like three paragraphs. (Henceforth, space between paragraphs.)

I probably won't comment on everything, but somebody will (I hope) pick up the slack.

First paragraph. Say:

My review today will be based on the book "Xenophobe's Guide to the Russians," written by Vladimir Xelvis. It was published in 2001.

And:

Each book helps the reader get familiar with a particular nation or culture.
 
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Second paragraph. Perhaps:

At the beginning there is nothing objectionable, but as you read past the introductory paragraphs you realize that the author has repeated the standard myths about Russia and Russians: that all Russians do nothing but drink vodka all day long, that Russian education is the best in the world, that children are brought up by bad-looking but loving "babushkas" and that under Socialism one would be sent to a concentration camp for any expression of dissenting political views.
 
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Thanks a lot for your help!
 

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Did you intentionally misspell "English" in your username?
 

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WantToKnow, you haven't given any "likes" yet to any of the replies you've received.
 
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Don't use the phrase "nothing is actually wondering" again. (If you saw that phrase in a book throw away the book.)
 

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Next sentence. Say:

In fact, you will learn how the poor lived in central Russia 20-30 years ago.
 

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Say:

Most changes in the Russian lifestyle are ignored.
 
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