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    Exclamation "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than 2000

    "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than 2000 people, was a real disaster."

    Do the non-definite adjective clause part define correctly?

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    I'm not sure what you're asking but in any case it's not a good sentence. I want to correct it, either to

    A tsunami occurred..., killing more than 2000 people.

    or

    The tsunami that occurred..., killing more than 2000 people, was a real disaster.

    (I don't like was a real disaster -- of course it was a disaster!)

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    Quote Originally Posted by jutfrank View Post
    I'm not sure what you're asking but in any case it's not a good sentence. I want to correct it, either to


    The tsunami that occurred..., killing more than 2000 people, was a real disaster.

    (I don't like was a real disaster -- of course it was a disaster!)
    Thanks teacher.
    Does this sound better?
    A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than 2000 people, shocked the world."

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    Quote Originally Posted by nininaz View Post
    Does this sound better?
    A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than 2000 people, shocked the world."
    That's natural.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    Yes.

    But it sounds even better beginning with The tsunami... since this is followed by a defining relative clause (...that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004).

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    Also, from a factual viewpoint, your death toll is off by a factor of 100.

    I'm not sure if it's a typo or confusion about numbers in English, but the death toll from that earthquake and tsunami was actually well over 200,000, not 2,000.
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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    Quote Originally Posted by Skrej View Post
    Also, from a factual viewpoint, your death toll is off by a factor of 100.

    I'm not sure if it's a typo or confusion about numbers in English, but the death toll from that earthquake and tsunami was actually well over 200,000, not 2,000.
    Source: Writing academic English Longman

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    Re: "A tsunami that occurred in the Indian Ocean in December 2004, killing more than

    If this was a cited source, you should have mentioned the source in your first post.
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