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    Mobile phones- a flawed invention
    From many decades and mobile phones have been one of the most (useful modern technology) item used, but despite its usefulness, why do a lot of people regard it as a harmful devices?
    Because of their convenience, mobile phones have become universally popular. With them, we can call anyone at any time, no matter how much the distance lies, our phones keeps us in constant communication with our friends, our families or even in business. Mobile phones allows us to use special apps to listen to music, playing games, surfing the net and text messaging. Its hard to picture our life as it was before the mobile phones

    But, there are many disadvantage regarding the use of mobile phones for example (mobile phones are a proven health hazard), using mobile phones is said to be harmful to the brain especially those under the age of sixteen. Excessive use of mobile phones has been accused of causing dizziness and radiations emitted from the phone are considered deadly harmful for eyes. Other than causing harmful effect on our body, drivers distracted by taking on their cell phones are more likely to get into car crash

    Mobile phones solves problem and provide new ways of communication. We can access all the world's information no matter where we are just by using a small devices which can fit in the palm of the hand.
    But be careful mobile phones might also be bad for you!

    P/s: please help me to correct this article I have exams 3 days more and I am not confident about what I wrote .. thanks in advance.
    Last edited by rahma hassan; 31-Jan-2017 at 11:01. Reason: Standardised font

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    Re: mobile phones

    The first thing you need to do is click on "Edit Post" and change the first letter of every sentence, and every instance of the word "I", to a capital letter. Also, in your "PS", you used "plz". That is not a word - it's "please".
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: mobile phones

    I have already edited it, please check it for me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by rahma hassan View Post
    Mobile phones - a flawed invention?

    From For many decades, and mobile phones have been one of the most useful pieces/examples of modern technology item used, but despite its their usefulness, why do a lot of people regard it them as a harmful? devices?

    Because of their convenience they are so convenient, mobile phones have become universally popular. With them, we can call anyone at any time, no matter how much the distance lies between us. Our phones keeps keep us in constant communication contact with our friends, our families or even in with businesses. Mobile phones allows allow us to use special apps to listen to music, playing play games, surfing surf the net and send text messaging messages. It's hard to picture our life as it was before the mobile phones.

    But However, there are many disadvantages regarding to the use of mobile phones. For example, (no bracket here) mobile phones are a proven health hazard (no bracket here) - using mobile phones is said to be harmful to the brain, especially for those under the age of sixteen. Excessive use of mobile phones has been accused blamed of for causing dizziness, and radiations the radiation emitted from them phone are is considered to be deadly harmful for to the eyes. Other than In addition to causing these harmful effects on our body, drivers distracted by talking on their cell mobile phones are more likely to get into a car crash.

    Mobile phones solves solve many problems and provide new ways of communication to communicate. We can access all the world's information in the world no matter where we are just by using a small devices device which can fit in the palm of the hand.
    But be careful - mobile phones might also be bad for you!

    P/s PS - please help me to correct this article. I have exams in 3 days more and I am not confident about what I wrote. Thanks in advance.
    See above. You need to remember that "mobile phones" is a plural noun so it needs to be followed by the third person plural form of a verb. You used the third person singular almost every time.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: mobile phones

    Thanks a lot... it seems that i need a lot of practice to be good at writing. Can you advise me of anyway to improve my writing because no matter how much i wrote, it isn't getting any better.

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    Re: mobile phones

    Quote Originally Posted by rahma hassan View Post
    Thanks a lot. It seems that I need a lot of practice to be good at writing. Can you advise me of any way to improve my writing because no matter how much I write, it isn't getting I don't get any better.
    The simple answer is practice! Also, read as much as you can in English. Read newspapers, magazines, websites and books in English. It's amazing how many little things you will start to pick up when you see them over and over again by native speakers.

    Practise short, simple sentences and practise the basics until you're certain you've got them right. For example, as I pointed out in post #2, you used the third person singular ending many times for a third person plural verb. Concentrate, for now, on making sure you understand verb endings in the present tense. Also, as you can see above, you consistently fail to capitalise the word "I". That's something you have to fix.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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