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    The afternoon traffic was slow

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural. Is it correct to put a comma after "slow" and continue with "vehicles," or would it be better to add "and" and write: "and vehicles were grinding their way through the snowbound streets?"

    The afternoon traffic was slow, vehicles grinding their way through the snowbound streets.
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    #2

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    No, the comma is not good. Yes, your alternative is fine.

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    #3

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    OR

    The afternoon traffic was slow, with vehicles grinding their way through the snowbound streets.
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    #4

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    Quote Originally Posted by jutfrank View Post
    No, the comma is not good. Yes, your alternative is fine.
    With respect, I disagree. To me the comma here is essential, and I don't say that about very many commas.
    Last edited by probus; 01-Feb-2017 at 04:06.

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    #5

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    Perhaps:

    The afternoon traffic was slow, people driving at a snail's pace on the snow-packed streets.

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    #6

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    It was St. Louis in the winter. It was rush hour, but nobody was exactly rushing. That's because the streets were covered with ice.
    Ice is the worst. You can't brake, and you can't steer (not at normal speeds anyhow). The freezing rain (or sleet) had come at the worst possible time. The streets were jammed with traffic. We moved very slowly, and a person on foot could have probably outwalked us.
    I was the driver that day, so I remember it from that perspective. As somebody watching from the sidewalk I would have thought: "The cars are moving really slow." I would NOT have said the vehicles were grinding.

    In case you are wondering, I did get us home without hitting anybody.
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 31-Jan-2017 at 14:18. Reason: Combined three posts that seemed to tell one story

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    #7

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    Why are my posts so short? Well, I lost two this time. (Where they go I do not know.)

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    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    I've just merged posts 6, 7 and 8 as they appeared to constitute one story so should have been in one post to avoid making threads unnecessarily long.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    #9

    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    Read post #7.

    (I tried to put it all in one post, but it disappeared. (I used the auto save feature for perhaps the first time, and it brought back some of my text.))
    Last edited by Tarheel; 31-Jan-2017 at 14:29.

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    Re: Th afternoon traffic was slow

    I'm not sure what you mean. I just answered your query in post #7 about where those two posts (which were originally 7 and 8) went. They have been added to post 6.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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