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    A young man's life...

    Can anyone check my writing please, thanks.

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    A young man's life is turned upside down after he embarks on a road trip with the love of his life, as they encounter something unexpected events which take a turn for the worse.

    Long summary
    A happy-go-lucky young man embarks on a road trip with the love of his life. However, in an unexpected turn of events, he and his loved ones are embroiled in a high-risk situation, which demands that he rise to the occasion and stand his ground against the odds. What exactly happens during their trip?

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    Re: A young man's life...

    What is it a summary of?

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    Re: A young man's life...

    Quote Originally Posted by Rover_KE View Post
    What is it a summary of?
    It's a movie summary teacher.

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    A young man's life

    Hi, I would really appreciate it if someone could check my writing below. Thank you.


    Short summary
    A young man's life is turned upside down after he embarks on a road trip with the love of his life, as they encounter something unexpected events which take a turn for the worse.

    Long summary
    A happy-go-lucky young man embarks on a road trip with the love of his life. However, in an unexpected turn of events, he and his loved ones are embroiled in a high-risk situation, which demands that he rise to the occasion and stand his ground against the odds. What exactly happens during their road trip? What is the cause behind this horrible nightmare?

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    Re: A young man's life

    Quote Originally Posted by Gaya87 View Post
    Hi, I would really appreciate it if someone could check my writing below. Thank you.


    Short summary
    A young man's life is turned upside down after he embarks on a road trip with the love of his life, as they encounter something unexpected events which take a turn for the worse.

    Long summary
    A happy-go-lucky young man embarks on a road trip with the love of his life. However, in an unexpected turn of events, he and his loved ones are embroiled in a high-risk situation, which demands that he rise to the occasion and stand his ground against the odds. What exactly happens during their road trip? What is the cause behind this horrible nightmare?
    How many people travelled with the young man?
    I am not a teacher or a native speaker.

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    Re: A young man's life...

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    Please comment on my writing.

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    A young man's life is turned upside down when he takes a road trip with the love of his life. Many surprising things happen to them.

    Do not try to cram too much into one sentence.

    Things have to be bad before they can go from bad to worse.

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    Re: A young man's life...

    I have merged the two threads.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: A young man's life

    Rewrite the long summary. (The first sentence is okay, but the rest makes no sense.)

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    Re: A young man's life

    Quote Originally Posted by tedmc View Post
    How many people travelled with the young man?
    Only one person.

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    Re: A young man's life...

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Say:

    Please comment on my writing.

    Perhaps:

    A young man's life is turned upside down when he takes a road trip with the love of his life. Many surprising things happen to them.

    Do not try to cram too much into one sentence.

    Things have to be bad before they can go from bad to worse.

    Noted. I will rewrite the both summaries. Thank you.

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