Bassim
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This text is a part of a short story, which I am still writing. It is mostly about the war between the Serbs and Croats in the 1990s. In this part a Serb soldier ponders about the war. Would you please correct my mistakes and help me with these sentences so that they sound natural?
Some weeks later, we were involved in skirmishes with the Croatian army, which was not a proper army at that time, but rather loose groups of volunteers like ourselves. This was not an ordinary warfare, where two armies fought along clear frontlines and abided by the Geneva Convention. Our war was barbaric and cruel, fought according to the rules of hatred. One village fought against another, neighbour against another, former colleagues against each other. There was no difference between soldiers and civilians; everyone was a target, even babies who understood nothing and clung to their mothers as a bullet or a piece of shrapnel shuttered their skulls.
Some weeks later, we were involved in skirmishes with the Croatian army, which was not a proper army at that time, but rather loose groups of volunteers like ourselves. This was not an ordinary warfare, where two armies fought along clear frontlines and abided by the Geneva Convention. Our war was barbaric and cruel, fought according to the rules of hatred. One village fought against another, neighbour against another, former colleagues against each other. There was no difference between soldiers and civilians; everyone was a target, even babies who understood nothing and clung to their mothers as a bullet or a piece of shrapnel shuttered their skulls.
