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    Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Greetings everyone ! Thank you for helping me in making my resume looks professional. I have added few bullet points to my existing resume and I would like to get your feedback on this. Please help !

    Leading ABC project to integrate low-level work management activities to mainstream work management activities
    Influencing several diversified stakeholders and Subjet Matter Experts to change their perception of workflow from isolated view to integrated/global view
    Identifying key reasons for the inception/existence of non-standard tools at department level and developing solutions to address those reasons to prevent departments to develop non-standard tools in the future
    Developed parts of business case and played a key role in getting ABC project approved by governing bodies


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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

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    Thank you for helping me make my resume look professional.

    What is it that you want to prevent the departments from doing?

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Identifying key reasons for the inception/existence of non-standard tools at department level and developing solutions to address those reasons to prevent departments to develop non-standard tools in the future
    You can stop this after "reasons."

    If you really want to repeat, then you need to say "...to prevent departments from developing..."

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Say:

    Thank you for helping me make my resume look professional.

    What is it that you want to prevent the departments from doing?
    Thank you. I found my mistake.. I should use the word "from" instead of "to" in the below sentence.

    "to from prevent departments to develop non-standard tools in the future"

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Quote Originally Posted by SoothingDave View Post
    You can stop this after "reasons."

    If you really want to repeat, then you need to say "...to prevent departments from developing..."
    Thank you. If that is considered as repeat I will end the sentence after "reasons".

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    I have added two more bullets to my resume. Please help correcting it.

    Managed multiple projects/efforts at a time while delivering the quality for each effort
    Collaborating with other highly interrelated projects in the same Program to ensure processes are aligned

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Quote Originally Posted by dhruva101 View Post
    Thank you. I found my mistake.. I should use the word "from" instead of "to" in the below sentence.

    "to from prevent departments to develop non-standard tools in the future"
    No. First, that isn't a sentence; but the correct phrase would be ​to prevent departments from developing non-standard tools in the future.
    I am not a teacher.

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    Re: Few bullet points in a resume - please help correcting it

    Quote Originally Posted by GoesStation View Post
    No. First, that isn't a sentence; but the correct phrase would be ​to prevent departments from developing non-standard tools in the future.
    Thank you ! Got it..

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    A few bullet points in a resume - please help me correct it

    Quote Originally Posted by dhruva101 View Post
    I have added two more bullets POINTS to my resume. Please help ME CORRECT it.

    Managed multiple projects/efforts at a time while delivering the quality for each effort
    Collaborating with other highly interrelated projects in the same Program to ensure processes are aligned

    Thank you !
    Dhruva
    Perhaps:

    Managed multiple projects while maintaining high quality standards

    Coordinated with other project managers in the same program to ensure processes are aligned

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    Re: A few bullet points in a resume - please help me correct it

    Quote Originally Posted by Tarheel View Post
    Perhaps:

    Managed multiple projects while maintaining high quality standards

    Coordinated with other project managers in the same program to ensure processes are aligned
    Thank you for the help..

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