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    After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately

    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately went to his old room and looked directly in the mirror. He pointed with his index finger and say “Kevin” in front of himself.

    For a second time, he looked directly in the mirror, and again started to point with his index finger saying “Kevin”

    Finally, for a third time, he did the same strange thing.

    After that Kevin got his second wind and left his parent's house.

    Thanks.

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    Re: After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Hello.

    Are the following sentences grammatically correct?

    After he founded found his old sneakers, Kevin immediately went to his old room and looked directly in the mirror. He pointed with his index finger and say said “Kevin” in front of to himself.

    For a second time, he looked directly in the mirror, and again started to pointed with his index finger, saying “Kevin”.

    Finally, for a third time, he did the same strange thing.

    After that, Kevin got his second wind and left his parents' house.

    Thanks.
    See my corrections above. I have underlined "got his second wind" because I don't think you understand what it means. It doesn't fit in this context. What are you trying to say?
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately

    Dear emsr2d2:

    First of all, thanks for your help and time.

    I tried to write that after he made the strange "ritual" in front of the mirror he felt with new energies to walk in the street. (like a placebo effect)

    Thanks!

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    Re: After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    Dear emsr2d2:

    First of all, thanks for your help and time.

    I tried to write show/indicate that after he made did the strange "ritual" in front of the mirror he felt with new energies he had a new burst of energy, and was able to walk in the street. (like a placebo effect)

    Thanks!
    I would say "After that, he felt re-energised and left ...".

    When someone gets "a/their second wind", it suggests that they were tired or out of energy shortly before that. There was nothing in your piece to suggest that that was the case.

    I ran for 25 minutes but then I was out of breath so I stopped for a break. After only a couple of minutes, I got a/my second wind and carried on running.
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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    Re: After he founded his old sneakers, Kevin immediately

    Quote Originally Posted by Nikitus View Post
    he felt with new energies
    Energy is usually uncountable, and in this case the plural does not work.

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