Bassim
VIP Member
- Joined
- Mar 1, 2008
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Bosnian
- Home Country
- Bosnia Herzegovina
- Current Location
- Sweden
I feel something is wrong with my sentences, but I cannot point out the mistake. Would you please correct my mistakes?
1.Peter sipped his beer, staring at the bosomy barmaid pulling the draught beer. He tried to pluck up courage to ask her for a date.
or this version:
2. Peter sipped his beer, staring at the bosomy barmaid, who pulled the draught beer. He tried to pluck up courage to ask her for a date.
1.Peter sipped his beer, staring at the bosomy barmaid pulling the draught beer. He tried to pluck up courage to ask her for a date.
or this version:
2. Peter sipped his beer, staring at the bosomy barmaid, who pulled the draught beer. He tried to pluck up courage to ask her for a date.