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    Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I am wondering if my sentence sounds natural.

    Clive's worse experience of boarding school happened one evening when someone threw a quilt over his head, and his roommates hit and kicked him all over his body.

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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    Review the comparative and superlative forms of bad.
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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    GoesStation,

    Thank you for reminding me of my mistakes and my weak points as regarding English. I will repeat my sentence with the correct form of "bad."

    Clive's worst experience of boarding school happened one evening when someone threw a quilt over his head, and his roommates hit and kicked him all over his body.

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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I would say "in boarding school" and "hit and kicked him all over."

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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I am wondering if use the preposition "from " in my sentence, would it be correct if I rephrase it like this:

    Clive's worst experience from the time he had been to boarding school happened one evening when someone threw a quilt over his head, and his roommates hit and kicked him all over.

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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    Quote Originally Posted by Bassim View Post
    I am wondering if use the preposition "from " in my sentence, would it be correct if I rephrase it like this:

    Clive's worst experience from the time he had been to boarding school happened one evening when someone threw a quilt over his head, and his roommates hit and kicked him all over.
    It's unnecessarily wordy and sounds like Clive had just visited a school briefly, rather than attending it. If you replace from the time he had been to with the single word in, you have a nearly-acceptable sentence. You should correct what I think is a comma splice; given my recent record here with grammar advice, I'll leave you with that.
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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I am not sure where I made a comma splice.
    Is it between "evening" and "when" like this:

    Clive's worst experience in boarding school happened one evening, when someone threw a quilt over his head, and his roommates hit and kicked him all over.

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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I'd remove both commas. I still wouldn't be crazy about the sentence but I think it works better without them.
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    Re: Clive's worse experience of boarding school

    I'd use "at boarding school" (BrE).
    Remember - if you don't use correct capitalisation, punctuation and spacing, anything you write will be incorrect.

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