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    Motivation Letter For A Bachelor Programme In Business Management

    Hello,

    I'm applying for a bachelor in Business Management program in Belgium. I would appreciate if someone could give me a hand with the motivation letter. I am certain that a lot of work still needs to be done. That's why I hope that you could assess the strengths and weaknesses in this letter.
    More important, please do not hesitate to provide constructive criticism and list suggestions for improvement concerning content and grammatical or phrasal mistakes.

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    Dear Sir or Madam,With this letter, I would like to express my strong interest in studying Business Management programme starting in September 2017 at the XXX University. I would like to introduce you some background information about my activity and then provide you with a clear statement of my purpose and intentions.

    In 2015 I completed my first music album after working on it for three years. I could not wait for more to share it with the world and went in search of A&R managers and music labels to help me promote and publish it. After getting in contact with the major labels Warner Music and Sony Music and negotiating terms of release, they finally decided not to put this album out. Nevertheless, I was passionate about my work and I was determined to publish it. In true entrepreneurial fashion, I self-published my album through the digital platforms Spotify and Apple Music. I collaborated with a promotional expert to organise a month-long tour to promote the album. Finally, the album reached high positions on several music charts and received attention from the biggest names in the music industry. My personal self-taught development through the theory of music production took years of patience and dedication, data analysis, discrepancy identification, an open-minded approach to problem-solving, being concise when self-evaluating and taught me how to be adaptable and calm when under pressure to achieve results in the most time-efficient manner. I realised that creating a song has similar properties to creating a successful business venture. These skills would be highly transferable to a business environment.

    Nonetheless, I was always looking for something more to expand my base knowledge in the world of media and entertainment business. Until I offered to be a part of a team of developing marketing department and to actively participate in business development, I did not recognise how valuable the “more” could be. I began combining my school work and my part time job as a Social Media and Content Manager in “XXX” Artist Management company. Through this experience, I learned the value of team working when all team members could all be the stakeholders rather than just presenting the strategy. I also learned how shared vision could hold your team together. This role had me implementing and carrying out projects, right from the initial brainstorm of what the young people would enjoy, to the evaluation, and development of further events. I had help organising youth club evenings, trips, arranging events, carrying out one to one meetings. My crowning glory came when I had the idea to get all of these areas to take part in an organising a music festival. I figured out how everything happens; initial research, outreach and communication, promotion, advertisement, project maintenance, execution, and evaluation. It was a tremendous effort to get everybody working together, but in the end, it was well worth it, and the festival was a complete success. As the project assistant, I was expected to demonstrate excellent organisational skills, be a motivational force, and inspirational teacher.

    On a larger scale, Economics Elective Courses organised at High School has shown me the basic role economics plays in our lives. It explains how items are priced, how markets ebb and flow, how the laws of demand and supply determine so much of what we do and condition the environment around us. Economics also provides knowledge of how business developments work and their impacts which are likely to succeed and those that will almost certainly fail.

    Although all of these have given me a satisfying life balance, sometimes I do so much that I do not take the time to stop and look around – to process what is happening, this was missing in my life. I know that the path I had been taking was the right one for me, I had just never actually felt ready to move on to the next phase. At this point, I thought about what I wanted for my future, not just career-wise, but to be happy and to contribute to the society.

    I am pursuing a degree to become a better business strategist and strong general manager with a sense of initiative and enterprise. As a BBM graduate, my goal is to obtain a position of a Brand Manager in strategy and business development department at an international entertainment company. Long term, I intend to develop an ambitious company related to the creative field and specialises in Artist Management, Record Label, Event Management or Publishing Agency. My company’s goal will be to help talented upcoming artists and provide quality service for the customers.

    Furthermore, I want to develop my leadership, presentation and social skills further as I will manage professionals on the creative and business side; it will be my task to unite team behind a shared strategic vision. Specifically, I would like to expand my knowledge in the human behaviour side. What makes people tick? What drives them forward? How to motivate teams and individuals to perform at their highest level and to become more adept at persuasion? Largest companies increasingly dominate the world in which we live, so what could be more captivating than studying the most influential collections of people on the planet? These dynamic organisations not only reflect but create the values of contemporary societies, shaping our beliefs and lifestyle choices. XXX's unique approach combining theory with practical case studies and hands-on work and involving a lot of group work as well as the individual approach will challenge me to grow in these areas and provide me with the critical professional experience.

    Also, Intense contacts with business companies and internships arranged in BBM course will help me to discover what doing business in real companies is all about. I am intrigued to know more about the connections between different teams and being on the inside, seeing and hearing how the company behaves and thinks.

    The programme covers a wide range of business topics, such as Marketing, Accounting, International Business, Distribution, Sales, Event Management and Communication. As a future business leader, I would like to become an expert in these fields, being capable of analysing and solving practical problems a company may face. I am confident that various traineeships and case assignments I will take part in during this course will help me to gain the necessary knowledge, skills and the ability to make tough decisions and provide criticism constructively.

    In addition, XXX BBM course delivers international mindset environment. I believe that that the only way to be successful, competitive and productive in today’s business world is to develop it in a global context. I find XXX university the best place to learn how to communicate with people from different backgrounds to achieve the best results which will be the next crucial step in my development.

    Last but certainly not least, studying abroad will significantly improve my English skills. Being an international language, English will help me to form new connections and widen my socialising skills to a global level. Moreover, additional Intensive courses of foreign languages will expand my international career potentials, make me more flexible and open to other cultures and develop my multitasking skills. Because of such a cultural diversity, I will have an opportunity to come across a variety of points of view and make thorough solutions.

    Besides, I also feel that I have much to contribute to XXX community. My varied background in fields of media and business has given me a unique perspective that will be valuable in discussions and team projects. I will enrich the program by enabling fellow students and professors to benefit from my ambitious and open nature.

    Nevertheless, I assume that studying abroad is going to be the most challenging step in my life so far. However, stepping out from a comfort zone will be a character building opportunity that will make me perspective broader in professional and personal ways. Besides, It will be an excellent opportunity to interact with the new culture.

    In closing, I believe my background gives me the capacity for fearless and open-minded thinking that is needed to meet the challenges of the business industry’s shifting landscape. I am confident that XXX Bachelor of Business Management program will strengthen that foundation and help me to become the kind of dynamic leader who can bring the vision for a company to life and be at the forefront of business’s structural shift. I am confident that I will bring a high level of energy and enthusiasm to your program. I am sure to exceed your expectations, because of both my academic and interpersonal skills as well as the experience gained.

    I appreciate your consideration and look forward to your positive response.

    Yours faithfully,
    Daniel XXX
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    Re: Motivation Letter For A Bachelor Programme In Business Management

    Hello montmont, and welcome to the forum.

    I note that your letter is over 1,400 words long. This is excessive, and no one has the time, inclination or the energy to go through such a long letter. Squeeze it down to around 500 words; that's how long a typical motivation letter would be.

    So, redraft your letter (bearing in mind the above); post it again, and one of us will look at it for you.

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    Re: Motivation Letter For A Bachelor Programme In Business Management

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Hello montmont, and welcome to the forum.

    I note that your letter is over 1,400 words long. This is excessive, and no one has the time, inclination or the energy to go through such a long letter. Squeeze it down to around 500 words; that's how long a typical motivation letter would be.

    So, redraft your letter (bearing in mind the above); post it again, and one of us will look at it for you.
    Hey, thank you for your kindness and warm welcome. I will do it for sure. Should I post it in this thread?

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    Re: Motivation Letter For A Bachelor Programme In Business Management

    You're welcome, and yes, you can post it right here.

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    Re: Motivation Letter For A Bachelor Programme In Business Management

    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    You're welcome, and yes, you can post it right here.
    I have fundamentally changed the content and squeezed the letter down to around 1000 words (I required to write two A4 pages). I will also appreciate any comments regarding the content of the draft.

    Thank you.


    A desire to set new benchmarks for growth and to become a better business strategist with a sense of initiative and enterprise, motivated me to pursue a Bachelor in Business Administration. I believe that my background has instilled in me the qualities required to meet the rigor of this course, and subsequently, the career. I bring along with me a strong grasp of fundamentals in Entertainment Business, unique but relevant work experience, along with a desire to learn, a penchant for teamwork and leadership, and a zest for challenges.


    A great leader aspires to do more than just accomplish the objective. Until I offered to be a part of a team of the marketing department and to participate in business development actively, I did not recognize how valuable the “more” could be. I began balancing my school work and my part time job as a Social Media and Content Manager in “XXX” Management company. This role had me implementing and carrying out projects, right from the initial brainstorm, to the evaluation, and development. I figured out how everything happens; initial research, outreach and communication, promotion, advertisement, project maintenance, execution, and evaluation. Nevertheless, It was a tremendous effort to get a team works together, but in the end, it was well worth it. Through this experience, I learned that leading is as much about accomplish your objective as it about holding your team together.


    On a larger scale, Economics Course at High School has shown me the fundamental role economics plays in our lives. It explains how items priced, how markets ebb and flow, how the laws of demand and supply determine so much of what we do and condition the environment around us. Economics also provides knowledge of how business developments work and their impacts which are likely to succeed and those that will almost certainly fail.


    My personal self-taught development through the theory of music production and audio engineering took years of patience and dedication, data analysis, discrepancy identification, an open-minded approach to problem-solving, being concise when self-evaluating taught me how to be adaptable and calm when under pressure to achieve results in the most time-efficient manner. I realized that creating a song has similar properties to creating a successful business venture. These skills would be highly transferable to a business environment.


    This unique but relevant blend of experiences has made me a person with a complex approach to any situation. It has given me a broader perspective, understanding of life and a goal to aim for. I know that the path I had been taking was the right one, I had just never actually felt ready to move on to the next phase. At this point, I thought about what I wanted for my future, not just career-wise, but to be happy and to give back something valuable to the society.


    As a BBA graduate, my near term plan is to obtain a position in strategy and business development department at an international entertainment company. This will enable me to identify and assess market opportunities, effectively promote and launch new products and grow to senior leadership positions in the business. It will help me towards building competencies in management and marketing and achieving my goal of being a successful entrepreneur. Work experience in a multi-national corporation would also bring in environments to team up with individuals from a range of backgrounds and to learn from their perspectives and experiences. Long term, I intend to develop an ambitious company related to the creative field specializes in Artist Management. The company’s goal will be to help talented upcoming artists. The services will contain management of artist’s global careers, development of professional business and marketing strategies, management of tour operations.

    Furthermore, I want to further my leadership, presentation, and social skills as I will manage professionals on the creative and business side; it will be my task to unite team behind a shared strategic vision. Specifically, I would like to delve deeper into the human behavior. What makes people tick and drives them forward? How to motivate teams and individuals to perform at their highest level? How to become more adept at persuasion? Largest corporations increasingly dominate the world in which we live, so what could be more captivating than studying the most influential collections of people on the planet? These dynamic organizations not only reflect but create the values of contemporary societies, shaping our beliefs and lifestyle choices.


    The program covers a wide range of business topics, such as Entrepreneurship and Business Planning, Marketing, Accounting, Innovation Management and Communication. As a future business leader, I would like to become an expert in these fields, capable of analyzing and solving practical problems an enterprise may face. I believe that case assignments and researches I will take part in during this course will further my both analytical and academic skills and professional communication skills. I will learn to think critically and to present my findings in a concrete and concise manner.

    Last but certainly not least, XXX BBA program has a strong international mindset environment. Intensive courses of foreign languages will both expand my international career potentials and make me more flexible to other cultures as well as form new connections and widen my socializing skills to a global level. The cultural diversity of the program will challenge me to strengthen my team skills in a cross-national environment and to come across a variety of points of view from multiple perspectives and, consequently, make complex solutions and accurate decisions.

    Nevertheless, I assume that studying abroad is going to be the most challenging step in my life so far. However, this decisive step forward will be an opportunity that will make me perspective broader in professional and personal ways and enable understanding at the greater level of business complexity.


    In closing, I believe my background gives me the capacity for fearless and open-minded thinking that is needed to meet the challenges of the business industry’s shifting landscape. Bachelor of Business Administration program will strengthen that foundation and help me to become the kind of dynamic leader who can bring the vision for a company to life and be at the forefront of business’s structural shift. In turn, I will enrich the program by enabling fellow students and professors to benefit from my ambitious and open nature. I will bring a high level of energy and enthusiasm to your program, and I am sure to exceed your expectations, because of both my academic and interpersonal skills as well as unique perspective gained.


    I sincerely hope that I qualify all the requirements for admission into your BBA Program and that my application is favorably received by the admissions committee.


    Yours faithfully,
    Daniel XXX

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    I am required to write two A4 pages.
    Are you sure? Is there a link to the requirements for that application? I'd like to see that so that I can also have an idea about how best to edit your letter. You can PM me with the link to the requirements if you prefer.

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    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    Are you sure? Is there a link to the requirements for that application? I'd like to see that so that I can also have an idea about how best to edit your letter. You can PM me with the link to the requirements if you prefer.
    How can I send you a PM? I've tried to find the link but no luck :(

    Thanks

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    You need to have written a certain number of posts (10, I think) first to be able to send a PM or an email.

    I have an idea. Try writing a few posts in the Fun and Games sub-forum.

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    Quote Originally Posted by teechar View Post
    You need to have written a certain number of posts (10, I think) first to be able to send a PM or an email.

    I have an idea. Try writing a few posts in the Fun and Games sub-forum.
    The link still doesn't appear

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    Hey teechar, I've just sent you a PM!

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