yslamac
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Please improve the letter below. Thank you.:-D
Q: Many people say that private school bus service operators do not follow proper safety procedures when dealing with young children and they argue that this may pose a danger. Write a letter to the Bus Operators Association of Hong Kong to express your concerns and give three recommendations for how private school bus services can be improved.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regards to highlight the urgent need for an improvement in the bus service provided your company to private school. Many parents are complaining about the failure of the operators to comply with the safety measures set out by the Education Bureau. Despite the relentless complaints filed by the parents, the operators seem to drag their feet into improving their services, and even turn a blind eye to the emergent danger that might pose on the students. As one of the parents who are very much worrying about this matter, I hope it can be addressed promptly with my recommendations.
First and foremost, it is necessary to arrange a helper for each trip when a school bus is on the way to school and to home. Many students, if not all, are playful and cunning. Sometimes they might tease, scream and even beat other students on the bus. Surprisingly, the operators do not employ a helper whose job is to make sure every student is well-disciplined, and to settle any disputes between them. Instead, the operators simply ask senior students to be a so-called “Bus Prefect”. I appreciate this act to a certain extent as students can grasp this opportunity to manage quarrels or fights; however, they are minors and might not able to handle things in a mature way. There was an incident that two boys in senior form fought with each other, and both of them were admitted to the hospital in the end. We understand that the arrangement for a school bus helper will increase the operation cost. Nevertheless, the adjustment in bus fare in last month should cover the additional expense for the employment.
Another must-do new measure is taking attendance. Whenever my son gets on the school bus, he can just sit down directly without someone to take his attendance. Although taking attendance is a small act, it means a lot to students’ safety. Some students travel to school alone; there is a possibility that they would fool around and escape from school without adults’ companion. Even worse, they might be abducted easily as we can spot an uptick regarding missing children recently. We are very much alarmed by all such incidents related and therefore it is a mandate to adopt this new measure.
Yours faithfully,
Q: Many people say that private school bus service operators do not follow proper safety procedures when dealing with young children and they argue that this may pose a danger. Write a letter to the Bus Operators Association of Hong Kong to express your concerns and give three recommendations for how private school bus services can be improved.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing with regards to highlight the urgent need for an improvement in the bus service provided your company to private school. Many parents are complaining about the failure of the operators to comply with the safety measures set out by the Education Bureau. Despite the relentless complaints filed by the parents, the operators seem to drag their feet into improving their services, and even turn a blind eye to the emergent danger that might pose on the students. As one of the parents who are very much worrying about this matter, I hope it can be addressed promptly with my recommendations.
First and foremost, it is necessary to arrange a helper for each trip when a school bus is on the way to school and to home. Many students, if not all, are playful and cunning. Sometimes they might tease, scream and even beat other students on the bus. Surprisingly, the operators do not employ a helper whose job is to make sure every student is well-disciplined, and to settle any disputes between them. Instead, the operators simply ask senior students to be a so-called “Bus Prefect”. I appreciate this act to a certain extent as students can grasp this opportunity to manage quarrels or fights; however, they are minors and might not able to handle things in a mature way. There was an incident that two boys in senior form fought with each other, and both of them were admitted to the hospital in the end. We understand that the arrangement for a school bus helper will increase the operation cost. Nevertheless, the adjustment in bus fare in last month should cover the additional expense for the employment.
Another must-do new measure is taking attendance. Whenever my son gets on the school bus, he can just sit down directly without someone to take his attendance. Although taking attendance is a small act, it means a lot to students’ safety. Some students travel to school alone; there is a possibility that they would fool around and escape from school without adults’ companion. Even worse, they might be abducted easily as we can spot an uptick regarding missing children recently. We are very much alarmed by all such incidents related and therefore it is a mandate to adopt this new measure.
Yours faithfully,
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